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Old 03-23-08, 09:33 AM   #1
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PEEP IT- ill freestyle

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Yea, that bomb chronic, Im on it
If popo come than i run like sonic
Ima pimp, i get head like bonnets
Make a bitch scream woo hoo like vonage- I do shit
Your girl gave my dick flowers- TuLips
Clueless Bitch, just listen, stop playin mindgames
What you think your special? This dates onna timeframe
Didnt use a condom once, now she wanna get it raw
But if she wanna suck my dick i tell her getta bigga jaw
My games on so tight i dont think itll ever fall
Cmon nigga think you tough Ill merk you all
Gettin ballsy? Ill beat you dicks like i was jerkin off
No homo, How you hustle with no work involved
Dealin with so many clowns, Its like a circus dog
Im certain yall, that wack shit you spit
Hang it up like curtains dog or burn it in a furnace dog
I spit sick venom, I got that poison flu
Think u wild child mimes make more noise than you
We make it hotter than a motherfuckin boilin room
If you get close to me, im Adam like Eve
Put em underground, Plant em like seeds
Bitches see, you know i bag em like groceries
Other rappers arent there, they ilke ghosts to me
Me and all my niggas full of scrap
You goin nowhere runnin circles like a culdesack
One on one, there aint no one to pull us back
And when your nigga gets mad ud think the hulk was black

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Old 03-23-08, 09:43 AM   #2
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cmonn this needs to get commented on. ASAP
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Old 03-23-08, 08:33 PM   #3
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upppinnnnnn cmonn
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Old 03-23-08, 09:45 PM   #4
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Old 03-23-08, 10:02 PM   #5
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Old 03-26-08, 09:24 PM   #6
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shit was ok...i guess, good to see people back form 05..start people
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Old 04-05-08, 07:23 AM   #7
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this is cool....you had some original shit and some not so original shit....all in all fairly witty...but you could definately do better on your word choice and syllable count..if you could get display a better understanding of those things i think that would definately manifest itself in your writing....thus taking it to the next level...stay up..1
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Old 04-05-08, 11:25 AM   #8
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nice flow, freestyle pretty good as i read it and spit it and try to picture someone spitting it outta the blue, work on punches multies and you'll become alot better
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Old 04-05-08, 06:15 PM   #9
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yeahh thats pretty much what i did haha and i was like illll freestyle cause it was kind of on spot at my boys house and he was writing it down as i was spittin. hahaa
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