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03-09-09, 08:25 AM
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The Write Weight
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Johnny 6-feet (0-0) vs Fuck Yuu (0-0)
IP: 3839 9710
Week 2 of Write Away Your Thoughts Topical League Johnny 6-feet vs Fuck Yuu Rules RULES No biting No recycling No Swaying If caught biting, auto boot from league, and ban request given. If caught recycling, auto loss for the week, possible boot from league. If caught swaying, 3 votes off per comment in which you 'swayed'. Dates Battles set on Monday. Checkin in Wednesday Midnight Pacific. Drop by Friday Midnight Pacific. Battles Close Sunday Midnight Pacific and new Battles will be posted as well. Once your verse is up you can't explain what it is about or complain it was a 15 minute drop or whatever GOT IT! get it straight writing is never a mistake.... if you fail to make it a good write blame yourself in not having enough influence to getting it down right! If you do this, I consider it swaying so you'll get 3 votes off per comment in which you swayed. LINE LIMIT You must drop more than 8 bars (16 lines) for your verse to be considered official. But, you may not drop more than 25 bars (50 lines), if you do so you will be DQ'd for the week and given a loss. NO SHOWING If you no show, you get an auto loss for the week. If you no show two weeks in a row you will be booted for the remainder of the season. After you no show the first time, I will send a PM to you reminding you about WAYT. If you don't think you can show a week, let me know - ask for an extension, sign out the week before. Do something to prevent no showing. We do not want this league to become inactive. EXTENSIONS! Extensions will be granted by Write & I. If you don't have a good explination, your fucked. & you also will need to PM us ahead of time, not 5 minutes before they're due, we're not dumb your just lazy. I'm gonna say you need to send us your extension request by Thursday Midnight Pacific. Any extension request after that time will be denied. Note: We won't be granting extensions to those who repeatedly request every week. If you are having trouble showing, you'll take the loss. Duration of Season this is goes on for 12 weeks not including a one week pre-season. the playoffs is elimination so once you lose in the playoffs your OUT there is no second place winner or third, only one WINNER! Playoffs We let everyone get a chance at playoffs. But, the better your record the higher your seed. If you get a number one seed, you'll be battling the bottom of the rack. So get those records up. Voting You MUST vote on 2 battles before Sunday, and post the links of those battles in your 'check in' post. IF YOU DO NOT DO SO: you will be DQ'd. One link will not cut it, both or an auto loss. I don't care if you are winning by 15 votes, if you don't have links and your opponent does, he'll take the win. No if, ands, or buts about it. Follow this rule. Once champ/contender matches are up, you will be required to vote on three battles, at least one has to be on a champ/contender match. I'm so tired of seeing people not voting on champ matches because they're a little longer or they feel they'll be dickriding. Just vote, it makes the league run smoother. It doesn't take but about 4 minutes. So, if you don't follow these rules, I'm giving no warnings. I'm very strict about this, and the rules will be linked in every battle every week. No excuses. Checkin in Wednesday Midnight Pacific. Drop by Friday Midnight Pacific. Voting ends Sunday Midnight Pacific. Topics MUST HAVE 2 LINKS IN CHECK-IN Last edited by Jonathon : 03-11-09 at 09:15 PM. |
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03-09-09, 08:38 AM
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IP: 0DAA 8F4D
Damn you jonathon. Lol. Goodluck johnny. You still writing over on rb
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03-09-09, 09:12 AM
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Herb
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IP: 4556 7CE7
Yeah man, i got back on the site to tune up on my topicals. Should a dope a match, let's get that battle of the week spot, yeah?
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03-09-09, 09:35 AM
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IP: 4859 033E
yeah hopefully. i'll be dropping today or tomorrow
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03-10-09, 12:22 PM
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Herb
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IP: 4556 7CE7
 The man stretched out on the psychiatrists couch An attempt to understand what the crying's about They said he needed to 'open up', he called it 'spilling his guts' To this lab coated prick taking notes; killing with paper cuts He began in the same place, his childhood memory's The incidents which made him mentally so vile and venomy Playground bullies introducing his face to the mud And he never really left it, that was his place there for good "You see doctor, i always felt alienated. Like my train of thought was derailed, while other people's was sedated. I had trouble making friends..." From the doc, a sympathic nod "Maybe it was constant detachment that make me pathetic, odd." They moved to his teenage years, the hormones and greasy skin His desire for a whore's moan and a bed to please him in And how then, dark thoughts began to creep through his mind Like a theif in the night, as silent as a mime "I always thought a few homicidal thoughts were normal. Well who doesn't sometimes think about death? You all do! I mean, sure, i stomped bugs as a kid for fun." The shrink scribbled faster "13, the first time i picked up a gun. Huntings natural isn't it? I had a void, it was filling me up Gunning an animal down and then spilling their guts In fact, that's why today i'm work in taxedermy" Another note on the shrink's pad 'He's defensive at the slightest inquiry He has more than a touch of homicidal behaviour Like to kill and stuff animals, guts them with a razor.' He was losing coherancy, his speech was running together The pitch was rising and crashing like the stormiest weather "They say when life gives you lemons you should make lemonade But what about when it PISSES ON YOU in the seventh grade? He stood up "Yeah, dad was never home, i could never get a date! Yeah, the kids laughed at me almost every lunch break!" "Calm down Mr Jones." "Fuck you! Isn't this what you wanted? To 'spill my guts' so you could judge me like my conscience? Would you like to hear my experiments on my latest project? His name was Steve i think, so do you think i'm odd yet?" The shrink made a run for it, almost made it to the door But was tackled with a crash and heavy graze on the floor Jones pinned his arms with his knees; pressed a hand to his mouth Drew a knife from his pocket, a madman in the house "This is only fair you know." From his mouth saliva poured through "Since you made me spill my guts, i should spill yours too." Last edited by Jonathon : 03-10-09 at 08:57 PM. |
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03-11-09, 11:21 AM
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IP: 80C1 51EA
Visions Blurred
-Love conquers all In realities fabric is a room Where all can be found in symbolism, Caution! The doorway could lead to your tomb. There is a mirror, reflecting schism Revealing the face found behind the mask Of lies told to keep the heart in prism. There is a clock, telling those who would ask A once upon a time that would be bridge To walk the path as exact to their task. There is a television, with image Projecting a false life through a false scream Falling over the ends of feeling's ridge. There is a bed, filled with the sleepless dream With apparitions of the hopeless parts But ever corrupted by others scheme. There is a necklace, bound to be by hearts Given in care, but lost when embody Aristocracy in feeling for arts. There is a suit, fitting to the body Flaunting figures without even a nod Without sacrifice it becomes shoddy. There is a hat, reminded of a God Even with highest minds it is above Inexorable in ways of facade. There is a person, debating a love Reminded of the workings of a room Of a room needing to fit like a glove. With all parts it's as sure as the rise of the moon. “Love conquers all things; let us surrender to Love.”
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03-11-09, 11:47 AM
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IP: A0BC FE33
vote: 6 feet....
had more creative thoughts and a better imagenation that painted a perfect picture ur story was deep the flow was smooth....ur 1st verse set the tone and never lacked from there, GREAT START TILL FINISH (NO WAY I CAN DO A TOPIC LIKE THAT DANM ) much respect and props.. i take back what i said when u introduce yaslef here... FU, u also had a good flow and was creative for topic mid-way in ya verse was when i thought u picked it up good job to both.... vote: 6 feet for having me more shocked and into the story.. |
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03-11-09, 08:14 PM
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What' it do?
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IP: 91BA 0020
Jonny-wow son, just as good as ever. I havent seen you in a while, i expected
you to be a bit rusty...but DOG, this was nasty. Fuckin dope ass shit, like in the beginning i figured you was going one way with it...then you went another way with it. And overall the twist up was fuckin amazing. I loved the imagery in this piece. Your wording was absolutely fabolous. All in all, i think you did rather well with this topic, not only crushing it in one direction...but like i said, you made a two side mirror with the choice of writing in this. I liked it. Not only did you have emotion, but you showed humour. Great shit. FU-i normally dont like this kind of structure. It kind of throws the flow and scheme off a bit...but i liked the way you did this. Your wording was a bit simple, overall i think you definately need to up your vocabulary a bit. But your imagery is there. Umm, i dont think you quite hit the topic as well as jonny did. but this verse wasnt bad. Kind of simple, but there. good job jumpin back in the saddle. v. jonny
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03-12-09, 05:52 PM
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New Jack
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IP: A1E4 9BCF
Johnny - Your verse was very nice, It went well with the picture and was a very smooth read. I followed along the whole way with the story, and the transition read smoothly and flowed nicely. The imagery was there, and the shrink patient concept to it increased it's dopeness. A very nice topical.
Fuck Yuu - You have a much different style than Johnny, and your structure makes your flow a bit harder to stay with. I'm not a big fan of the style personally, but it was decent enough here as the piece as a whole flowed decently. I thought the depictions of objects and society was very dope, but i felt like the piece as a whole lacked substance. The concept was dope, and I just feel like you could have done a lot more with it. Vote - Johnny 6-Feet |
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03-13-09, 08:00 PM
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Herb
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IP: 4556 7CE7
Done
-Fuck Yuu Last edited by Fuck Yuu : 03-13-09 at 08:49 PM. |
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03-13-09, 08:48 PM
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IP: 80C1 51EA
PM strobe and ask him to update your account so you can edit your posts.
but i'll do it now
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Fuck Yuu Productions
5x PS HOF 2004 Poet of the year 3X writer of the month |
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03-14-09, 12:43 AM
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The Write Weight
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IP: 3839 9710
up over closed.
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03-16-09, 05:34 PM
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The Write Weight
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IP: 3839 9710
Johnny wins, Fuck Yuu loses.
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