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06-09-07, 11:10 AM
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The Wind
IP: 8719 57C1
The Wind
so gracefull the softness of oxygeon so still it sits but a blow for the sound of wind a whistle a deep breath breathe the air digest it into your body the powers of the earth combined to make oxygeon the blow through my window chilly and nippy it comes refreshing your body as you sit outside and let the wind enwrap itself around you you deeply breathe in the wind... By Mav. |
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06-09-07, 11:10 AM
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IP: 8719 57C1
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06-10-07, 10:26 AM
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A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 4908 31E5
was okay, nothing special...imagery was iffy...there was some there man...just missed it by a little..i pictured leaves brustling in the wind..and felt like i was the wind...idk y..thats just wat was painted for me...it flowed nicely..and all that, im not a fan of the 2 word lines..but oh well lol...you followed the concept ok, nothing to creative or outstanding..but u followed the topic nonethe less
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A LIFE OF CHRYME |
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