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Old 06-08-07, 10:29 AM   #1
don cardyac
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Fear!

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people work cuz they fear not bein' able to eat/
people become packrats cuz they FEAR not bein' able to keep/
people hide cuz they FEAR what's goin' on in there lives/
people live right cuz they FEAR what'll happen after they die/
people read the dictionary FEARin' not bein' seen as bright/
people avoid me cuz they dont want me bein' seen wit' there wife/
FEAR dominates everyday life, and how we plan it/
so the one who supplys FEAR, should they be ruling the planet?/

FEAR, its what kept you from gettin' the girl/
that was sexy but 'chu wasn't confident enough to talk to/
FEAR, its what kept you from gettin' the money/
off the block that'chu aint feel safe enough to walk thru/
FEAR, if you walk in it, you gonna ride in it/
and if you live in it, than you gonna die in it/
FEAR, its the epidemic ruling the world/
but nobody ever really looks at who's supplyin' it/
due to FEAR.
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y'all ball, i just sign lines and let the words play/
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Old 06-09-07, 11:02 AM   #2
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Good work also needs links but I dont think you really understand how to wright poetry. This was more of anexplanation of what people fear rather than what you fear inside and you did not express the feelings that people would fear through these descriptions.
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Old 07-02-07, 03:51 PM   #3
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ehh it was pretty good. short and to the point. what i got from it was why people do the things they do. seems kinda shallow at sum points but overall pretty decent post.
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Old 07-24-07, 05:57 PM   #4
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Ehh it pretty good didnt think it was goin to be when i started but u got talent my nigg!
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