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No gay voting ring shit or aiming for votes...

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Draw a bar with this thread & seperate Tech from this wack herb...
Gone far to get some head but d/ring only elevates you back words!
Your flows lack words ...your vocabs practically in shambles
Structure So poor ...he posted up in'a shack eatin Cambles
Wins In scandals ...nothin but herb voters & noob challengers
Truth is... you only come hard lookin at homo nude calenders!
Just untalented ... it's a shame you have quality lyrics they're heated...
But that's only when absolutely nobody has to hear it or read it!
Ur rep receed's itself, leave u in worlds of pain blood seeps thru realms...
U weep & tell, nothin to show wore skin inside out to say u sleep in cells!
You need to go faster ...rhyme so slow I think you're brain dead....
Ur wordplays trash there... I dont have to mention it..it's plain said!

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before you read relize that a hyphans are whats on his name on both ends(the little straight lines)
Also look at the letter of my name in my sig...
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You a lame bitch, and you wont be hard to kill
At rap, you’re sub-par, f’real...
...Just look up at your verse, that shit’s far from ill!
I got the 4 and You better duck when I buss this shit
Plus This is nothin’ big...
...Cause, I’ll Black ya eye like my mother fuckin’ sig!
So Put it on the record; your not erasing this killing
Halfway through the battle...
....& You not facing me, nigga you facing the ceiling!
I aim to destroy this pig when I come into town
So to win this, I gotta’ dig deep...
...Yeah, deep enough to fit his fat ass in the ground!
You the type of nigga to die when I rejected ya writing
This battle is over....
Cause I crossed you out when I connected ya hyphens!
Ask Carson from ya crew, he knows my flame is hot
Plus you had the key to victor...Until I changed the lock!

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up.............nice battle................................votes.......

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Whats up Duck?


Draw a bar with this thread & seperate Tech from this wack herb...
Gone far to get some head but d/ring only elevates you back words!
alright opening.. Good follow through, metaphor in its dope. set could have been more
Your flows lack words ...your vocabs practically in shambles
Structure So poor ...he posted up in'a shack eatin Cambles
Eh, punchs are coming off weak here. Follow through wasnt much. set was alright but i didnt think it went any were with the follow through
Wins In scandals ...nothin but herb voters & noob challengers
Truth is... you only come hard lookin at homo nude calenders!
PLAYED, and the calender line sounds fimilar... the punchs over all werent that hard not much in direction either.... Ya DUCK
Just untalented ... it's a shame you have quality lyrics they're heated...
But that's only when absolutely nobody has to hear it or read it!
would have been a dope bar, except you killed the flow by adding the last to,.. other than that it was good.....
Ur rep receed's itself, leave u in worlds of pain blood seeps thru realms...
U weep & tell, nothin to show wore skin inside out to say u sleep in cells!
good line, more, metaphor is nice, the set needed a little rewording i thought
You need to go faster ...rhyme so slow I think you're brain dead....
Ur wordplays trash there... I dont have to mention it..it's plain said!
eh endign could have come over better...the punch is alright i guess

Over all i thought you lacked direction in your verse badly.
It came off generic, the flow was good, lacked alot on personals i thought. Metaphors were good, thought you had some alright ones..

Oh and before you run off saying a queer newbie statment like "get off my dick" get off yours and battle, lol look at who your facing.. Lol sup wicked, you tha same one at UF?
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You a lame bitch, and you wont be hard to kill
At rap, you’re sub-par, f’real...
opening could have been better i thought.. not much strength in them and lacked metaphor as well
...Just look up at your verse, that shit’s far from ill!
I got the 4 and You better duck when I buss this shit
Plus This is nothin’ big...
losing your rhyme scheme here.. flowed off i thought punchs arent really directing at all, lacking strength
...Cause, I’ll Black ya eye like my mother fuckin’ sig!
So Put it on the record; your not erasing this killing
Halfway through the battle...
heard it before i think.. punch is sorta of lacking.. metaphor was alright on the set, not feeling your structure though
....& You not facing me, nigga you facing the ceiling!
I aim to destroy this pig when I come into town
So to win this, I gotta’ dig deep...
eh, sort of flipped his bar in the opening// punch wasnt much, but could be building
...Yeah, deep enough to fit his fat ass in the ground!
You the type of nigga to die when I rejected ya writing
This battle is over....
not bad. good connecting. the punch lack though nothing went directed to dissing him, at least nothing hard
Cause I crossed you out when I connected ya hyphens!
Ask Carson from ya crew, he knows my flame is hot
Plus you had the key to victor...Until I changed the lock
dope ending. the over punch was ok, good personal, metaphor was a little played but still nice

I though you made up for alot towards the end, but i though your punchs could have been more directed to dissing him, could have used a little more personal init, the scheme was alright but i though how you rhymed trashed your structure.

Vote-Technician
Cmae with a better verse with punchs, strength was better and his metaphors was better... Ya DUCK

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^WTF...
You broke up my verse wrong...
You split my bars in half, which made you miss the rhyme and punch every line...
If you break it up, it should have been broken like this:

You a lame bitch, and you wont be hard to kill
At rap, you’re sub-par, f’real...
...Just look up at your verse, that shit’s far from ill!
[break]
I got the 4 and You better duck when I buss this shit
Plus This is nothin’ big...
...Cause, I’ll Black ya eye like my mother fuckin’ sig!
[break]
So Put it on the record; your not erasing this killing
Halfway through the battle...
....& You not facing me, nigga you facing the ceiling!
[break]
I aim to destroy this pig when I come into town
So to win this, I gotta’ dig deep...
...Yeah, deep enough to fit his fat ass in the ground!
[break]
You the type of nigga to die when I rejected ya writing
This battle is over....
Cause I crossed you out when I connected ya hyphens!
[break]

If you dont get the structure, don't vote!...

-W1
Ask Carson from ya crew, he knows my flame is hot
Plus you had the key to victor...Until I changed the lock!

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Draw a bar with this thread & seperate Tech from this wack herb...
Gone far to get some head but d/ring only elevates you back words!
nice...creative twist on a played concept
Your flows lack words ...your vocabs practically in shambles
Structure So poor ...he posted up in'a shack eatin Cambles
ok
Wins In scandals ...nothin but herb voters & noob challengers
Truth is... you only come hard lookin at homo nude calenders!
ok...kinda played
Just untalented ... it's a shame you have quality lyrics they're heated...
But that's only when absolutely nobody has to hear it or read it!
ok
Ur rep receed's itself, leave u in worlds of pain blood seeps thru realms...
U weep & tell, nothin to show wore skin inside out to say u sleep in cells!
lol nice
You need to go faster ...rhyme so slow I think you're brain dead....
Ur wordplays trash there... I dont have to mention it..it's plain said!
ok closer
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You a lame bitch, and you wont be hard to kill
At rap, you’re sub-par, f’real...
...Just look up at your verse, that shit’s far from ill!
ok set up and punch
I got the 4 and You better duck when I buss this shit
Plus This is nothin’ big...
...Cause, I’ll Black ya eye like my mother fuckin’ sig!
ok..played punch
So Put it on the record; your not erasing this killing
Halfway through the battle...
....& You not facing me, nigga you facing the ceiling!
weak
I aim to destroy this pig when I come into town
So to win this, I gotta’ dig deep...
...Yeah, deep enough to fit his fat ass in the ground!
ok
You the type of nigga to die when I rejected ya writing
This battle is over....
Cause I crossed you out when I connected ya hyphens!
nice personal
Ask Carson from ya crew, he knows my flame is hot
Plus you had the key to victor...Until I changed the lock!
played as fuck
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Tech takes this..It was close..but tech had better punches and personals...he also came less played and was more original and creative in his punches...W1cked came good...but he had too man played lines....Tech was mor consistent. Vote Tech

Please drop an honest vote here guys...Thanks http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112786

Lmao Guess i should have read it first.. lemmie Go over it real fast and make sure
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You a lame bitch, and you wont be hard to kill
At rap, you’re sub-par, f’real...
...Just look up at your verse, that shit’s far from ill!
still a weak opener... You know cutting yoru lines in half were the rhymes are doesnt make your shit look any more dope... Justmakes it look pretending to be dope
I got the 4 and You better duck when I buss this shit
Plus This is nothin’ big...
...Cause, I’ll Black ya eye like my mother fuckin’ sig!
blah blah blah, still sounds like ive heard this before.. nothing really hard at all
So Put it on the record; your not erasing this killing
Halfway through the battle...
....& You not facing me, nigga you facing the ceiling!
ok flip on his.. punch was WEAK
I aim to destroy this pig when I come into town
So to win this, I gotta’ dig deep...
...Yeah, deep enough to fit his fat ass in the ground!
eh.. LoL seemed better when i had your setup the way i put it... weak punch.. didnt direct really, seems.... gen-er-ic
You the type of nigga to die when I rejected ya writing
This battle is over....
Cause I crossed you out when I connected ya hyphens!
eh, this is alright.. not the hardest punch tough.. alright personal shot though
Ask Carson from ya crew, he knows my flame is hot
Plus you had the key to victor...Until I changed the lock
alright ending now.. the lack of the bar i put in kind took the strength i thought i saw..

OVER ALL LoL me lookign over your verse again made me see it was less of a match up than before.. You lacked punchs and direction.. It came off generic when you did connect.. and your metaphors were kind of basic.. witty in a way but still basic.

Oh and as far as the learn to understand your structure, the firs thing you should realise is structure exsist in text....... Try a RHYME-SCHEME. You should learn to put peroids on the end... See just like this > :-0 .

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Lets get some honest votes in here...
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I'll start of by saying it was a close battle, but also played.
As in, that both sides had played lines.
Anyways on with the breakdowns..
Tech, you actually kind of surprised me..some nice lines..
But for example lines like that homosexual line? no...
A big no..not only uncreative also just....stupid.
But dont get me wrong overall u had a excellent verse..
Go battle in Elevated or some..dont spend ur time in FL.. its uncool
Some potential quotables in there..good verse.

W1cked.
Played..BUT..damn.. i mean some of that shit was just dope.
The played shit was dope...BUT the non-played shit (lol) was dope too.
I like the structure u used..more of an LLL feel you know?
Quite witty at points..also very surprising.
I liked ur whole verse..with exclusion of ur closer..cause it was just to played..
But other then that...nice.
& U get my vote for a simply more witty & enjoyable verse.
Punches-wise it was pretty even but for the reason stated above..
W1cked

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Tech came harder i thought, he more creative disses that i thoguht hit better. wicked came aight, had an ok flow, but the punches really werent too good or witty, not very creative either.

vote-tech

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