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g'luck

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ayo if I wanted da title trust i could have-in dis' battle i would get in your ass,but word is your a fagat-if da oppurtunity comes to win tou betta grab it-or end up gettin' punched in da face till' you resemble lenny kravitz-believe or not da battle is mines-cause i'm about to blow ya spot up like cheeta's steppin' on mines-cause n'zyme couldn't rhyme even if i offered a lifeline-bout' to be known worldwide cause my flows is intercontinental-bangin' on tracks so hard sometimes i destroy my own instrumental-don't be mistakin' cause i'm new-cause basically in my world i'm Hitler and your the jew-don't spit back it's already ova-but if you wanna win use da tactics of true soulja- or whateva dat fags name is.

[QUOTE=killaconcepz]ayo if I wanted da title trust i could have it-in dis' battle i would get in your ass,but word is your a fagat-if da oppurtunity comes to win tou betta grab it-or end up gettin' punched in da face till' you resemble lenny kravitz-believe or not da battle is mines-cause i'm about to blow ya spot up like cheeta's steppin' on mines-cause n'zyme couldn't rhyme even if i offered a lifeline-bout' to be known worldwide cause my flows is intercontinental-bangin' on tracks so hard sometimes i destroy my own instrumental-don't be mistakin' cause i'm new-cause basically in my world i'm Hitler and your the jew-don't spit back it's already ova-but if you wanna win use da tactics of true soulja- or whateva dat fags name is.

sorry for mistake, ignore first flow

wolverine doesn't represent you, b/c u can't connect-a-cut
no shovel needed for this battle, your diggin your own rut
here's a concept, look at your verse, fix your damn structure
Urine so much trouble from these words i bet ya spleen will rupture
watch this kid fall in exhaustion, my heat has got this killa stroked
good thing there isn't a license to mc b/c your's would've been revoked
wannabe x-men, Marvel at my lyrics, whereas i just find you comical
the difference in quality between ya verse and mine is defined astronomical
u compiled a verse of run on sentences, threw them into one big paragraph
even you found my punches funny but you're just too scared to laugh

let's get some votes on this battle..........................................

N Zyme clearly takes this... more witty punches.. good personals.. structure/flow was on point etc..
Every catergory taken..
Killa.. sort out the structure first.. then try and add some witty personals to hit real hard..
Some decent attempts, but without a good flow your verse was virtually useless... cheetah/spot line was creative.. aim for similar..
Basically a very one sided battle..
For originality, structure, and witty punches..

Vote - N 'Zyme

Return the favour - http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110472

nzyme took this...punches were better, only cuz they existed in his verse...concpz was just wack....n zyme had a better structure too..both had kinda weak rhymes tho...

vote- n'zyme

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Axiom

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107780

hit that up with a vote

thanx

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uppin for some votes....................1x....................... ........

don't sleep on this.....................2x....................... ................

vote on mine and I'll tell some people to come vote in here..lol

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