(voices.....Mom's voice comes in: baby you gotta make it outta here...

Dad's voice: you aint gonna amount to shit....having babys, just like ya cousins....

Cousins: Once you make it out the hood you gonna forget where you came from)

I never woke up to birds singing outside with I was younga....
In my neighborhood...wake up call was the sound of a burna...
Only labor known in my hood was the hustle of the grind....
Fuck a 9 da 5...every man for himself...slaying nic's and dimes....
Little girls playing hopscotch where niggas put in they work...
Chicken heads in the strip club....tryin to get in a twirk...
Studyin the law just to figure out how to vitimize the system....
Goin through da drama....baby mama's always bitch'n...
Nourishing a 7 people family....and still keepin da bills paid...
Kind a hard when you getting paid unda minium wage....
Mom's dragging you church...(moms says: Honey the lord will solve 'em)
After kicking ya Dad out over his drinkin problem....
Getting rid of his sorry ass...might help us get stable...
Moms finally found Larry to put in da illegal cable....
Aint have no beach just T-shirts and a water hose...
Never saw a Disney Land but we was good at pretendin doe...
Christmas time in every childs mind the question stood...
I wonder will Santa Clause ever make it to my hood?
Never did....cuz we never saw the presents unda da tree....
Should have known free gifts were 2 true to be...
Mama told us....(mama voice: you'll make it out okay)
So, imma stay on my grind and wait for da day.....

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its coo keep em commin.

Good shit. Nice flow... Nothing seemed forced at all... Like, it all went together well.

Only gripe I got is maybe with the topic. Shit is pretty cliche, despite being executed well... Ya should always try to come off the top with some original shit. Sometimes it isnt enough to lay down your own version of a played topic.. you know?

And also watch the typos and abbreviations... I wouldnt recommend typing like you would in an instant messenger, cos it takes away from the impact... For example, fuk u and Fuck you or I luv u and I love you. Maybe its just me that thinks like that... I dunno.

Mind returning the favor?

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227338

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Thats for the feed back boo....i got you though....

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This piece was solid all the way through the verse...I can sense the emotion displayed when you were typing this...showin a lot of hurt as well as hope for an escape as it flowed smoothly...Only thing I didn't like about it was that the length of the verse could've had more lyrics...because it seems like it was interestin & just stopped. But overall, it was a good pieces from the way I can relate to details of ya hood because it shows me that every ghetto has the same shit, just different spots. Keep doing what you do

Okay Ma, Good Drop Im Feelin This

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