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05-20-05, 06:50 PM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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...Acuity-Reflections In Unknown Shadows...
IP: 3FC4 D8E8
Reflections In Unknown Shadows Sitting here with time, to challenge my mind and reflect on thoughts As his brush sweeps swea, dirt and musk from the platform, reflections run course Contemplating the numbers of souls who peformed and elevated happiness Pretending to be, ascending into anothers conscious with ironic realness Elevating, creating and invoking emotion, transforming hours worth of minutes Into a graceful personification of text and writing so that its visually infinite Many must have passed on that same stage that this employee cleans today Many must have experienced, many expeienced failure, many must be stilll here Audiences adhere, to this career, which takes has an eloquent skill within it Theres no limits to the feeling flowing out of that area, like a raging tsunami As the spotlights fall and disperse on the black rectangle of action, I theorise Like im an ancient chinese pphilosphoer pruning, nurturing a bonzai Right here im unknown and have plenty of time, finding solice in the unknown shadows With precise ideas sharper than frsh splinters, thinking like anno domin thinkers Manifesting imagination, as i degress into dreams, and shut my blinkers My feet stuck like velcro to whats beneath me, a young child must have been in this seat I shut my eyes, wonder and ponder if I can remove soul from body, and feel him in me And see what he must of saw, what took place on that swept and refreshed stage With every passing of that instrument of rebirth, another small memory is removed Another footstep moved or erased, another tear is dried, so thersno recollection of the cry My head rotates on its stem, and I marvel at the sheer epic nature in sight My eyesight feels blessed, cos within the mess and normality of this abnormality Comes a complex complexity from this simple simplicity, that is unfathomable to thee In glee, I arise and exclaim "bye" and to his surprise, for the past 3hours he was live A performer on a small portion of god's dimension, what a sense of adventure
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05-21-05, 07:33 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 46C2 FF91
Nice drop right here fam! Vocabulary was at a high level as usual and I just love the concept you are working with here, don't think I have seen it on RV before. Emotion was without a doubt the strongest aspect of your piece together with the imagery. You have an excellent writing style with a very vivid, poetic vibe. Had insightful lines in there that make the readers stand still and think about stuff for a sec.
Great job!
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05-22-05, 10:24 AM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: 4873 4B2B
Thanks DQ!!..............bump 4 feed
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05-23-05, 07:09 PM
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I walk & walk over you
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^^ Acuity, your my boi, but sorry to tell you, I'm taking back my poetic title back. Lol word.....
Let's battle. M~A
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05-23-05, 08:32 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: FE4C 9A0C
ha ha ha^^^, anyway. this piece was very nice, i like the structure that was forplayed in this. i like the way you binded everything to make sence. very nice syllables in someplaces. i like the repitition in some places also. this was in an indepth run of poetic rythm. this is a very good style of writing. keep your head up. holla back.
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05-29-05, 06:14 PM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: BD40 E296
word man..thanks ...bumping
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06-01-05, 12:51 AM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: 73E3 A2A2
bumping..................
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