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12-29-04, 10:25 PM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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acuity vs lyric
IP: 88C4 C811
Check Ins Must Be In By Friday Or Your Topic Wont Be Given...
If Check Ins Are In Then You Will Be Given A topic To Write About... Poems Then Must Be In By Sunday And Voting Will Be Over On Tuesday... TOPIC = Love Is For Ever Both agree'd on an extension....so hurry and get them drops in
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12-29-04, 11:37 PM
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Da KiNg Of PwNaGe
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IP: 25E4 9760
Checkin .
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12-30-04, 06:38 AM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: F892 61FE
chekin in ......
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01-03-05, 09:00 PM
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Love Is For Ever
IP: 95CA BE82
Love Is Forever
Thanks to Love,I feel like I've touched and felt each and every individual star Floated in the sky,Conversed with the constillations, travelled to random galaxies Its as if ive laid to rest on the clouds, and condescendingly looked down Upon the world, knowing that at these very moments i'm untouchable Judging in contempt, those that stride before me like a ruler on his bench I feel like in my palm I grasp an eternal flame, and no-one can dim its glow Change its destiny, or listen and appreciate its tender movements and tones In ur prescene i feel like light is shining out of each singular pore Bathing onlookers in our spiritual,emotional, and physical bond, love for all These reasons explain why my love is such an overwhelming powerful feeling It cant be ignored, its so beautiful and natural, its like it has a power of healing With its swift strike from Cupid's eye, it pushes people towards a better life Causes many to make a sacred bond in our soul's epic journey or carriage Embarking us on a life-long commitment, sworn by vows, to eachother in marriage A gift bestowed upon us on by whoever it is that resides above So valuable its priceless, symbolised by many by the morning flight of the dove By the pure redness of the heart, but it cant be constricted in an internal body part Our Love will survive, the apocalypse, the coming of the anti-christ, armageddon It will last in the subtleties of the breeze when the seas with blood have reddend When the barriers between the existing planes of life are destroyed and knocked away Our Love will endure, and find a place safe, to ly in rest, prevail another day Safely in the very grains of the soil beneath our feet, it'll be there in the times bitter sweet With its magnificent strength and power, helping to complete the incomplete Love Is Forever, it will remain in every dimension of existence Nothing has the force to separte or understand its existance, or withstand its persistance It is going to guide us, light the darkest paths, aid us in our every endeavour Ive anlaysed, loves effects,loves undeniable strength, and concluded why love is for ever
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01-03-05, 10:01 PM
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Da KiNg Of PwNaGe
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IP: 8FA7 A3EA
Love is Forever Tingles down my spine, as I took a shot of the divine Lifted me to heaven, as intoxication controlled my mind Took a drag from imagination, and exhaled my fantasies She emerged from the shadows, walked up next to me Just as sweet as could be, we had no complications Jumped over limitations then I fell into desperation Drove straight to the point, then made a right decision She said "Take a U-turn, time to follow my encryptions" I told her that I loved her, "Your name if I'm allowed?" Told my own and then we stowed, away on heavens clouds Landed in a cheap Motel, clothes evaporated onto hooks One night stand dancing in my head, as the furniture shook So much work and energy spent, alcohol still in my system Passed out from the vapors, of love and their victims Woke up bound and gagged, in a musty smelling basement Blood stains on ground, splashed over the cold pavement She towered in front of me, evil glistened in her eyes Kidnapping possessive demon, who caught another prize Smirking at me as I sat, helplessly handcuffed to a chair My attempts to talk, were muffled by thick depressing air Bells were ringing in my head, love? I guess I misheard She moved face to face, and then she softly whispered: “A hit and run? Nope sorry, that just isn’t the game I play Our love will be forever” as she turned and walked away Last edited by Lyric : 01-04-05 at 04:01 AM. |
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01-04-05, 06:39 PM
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STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 5671 DBDD
omg acuity that was a fucking emotional drop the words metas and shut was crazy especially in the end where you told how long it would last this was fucking dope as fuck herehow from the first line you just built up to flames shit brought a tear to my eye fo real was a deep emotional topic. good vocab good imagery everything but emotion wins poetry battles in my eyes you gave a vivid emotional drop this is probaly in the top ten poetry shits i ever read dopeness word a 10/10
lyric lmfao dope fucking story and madd orginal too good vocab good imagery also very very creative also this was a dope drop as well real dope here nice story i could see shit going down it shouldve been longer though much longer cuz it kinda cut the impact down of the shit it was dope but lacked one key element that ac had and that was deep emotional attachment which love is and thats why i think he had a better poem a 7.8/10
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01-04-05, 11:01 PM
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The Epitome Of Greatness
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IP: 3240 794D
wow best battle of the week
acuity: that was deep, real deep, you have the potential to be a great poetry writer and make a living out of it, that piece was just astounding, i read it twice becuase i liked it so much. The emotion was so indepth and visible and the reader gets pulled into the poem. even if i wanted to stop readin i couldnt have it was that good. you have a way with words dont lose that, because you made every line sound perfect in this verse. basically amazing piece overall : 9.8/10 lyric: im not taking anything away from you because of how i felt about acuity's verse., because yours was just as amazing. the imagery was perfect not one flaw there, the structure was perfect, the emotion was the only thing that wasnt perfect but it was damn close to being perfect. you have a way with words also and i guess your wordplay made up for the slight lack of emotion. but i felt that you should have continued with this a couple more lines and ended it the same way but added something more descriptive like how u said the smell of the room, you could have prolonged it with the aura of the scene or how you felt or something that would have gave your verse more of an edge on acuity. dope poem though overall: 9.5/10 vote: acuity without a doubt two of the best poets on rapverse were displayed here
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01-04-05, 11:49 PM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
the best battle of the week
acuity as usual you had an acceptionally decent drop,the imagery was decent not the best ive seen from you though,the emotion was good,you had some stretched ass lines...but it was coo,the vocab was actually okay in this,aswell was you word use,also your poem flowed decently,overall not a bad piece man 7.5/10 lyric you had a dope poem man ,the imagery was outstanding in my view it was quite vivid,the vocab and word choice was nicely done,the structure was nice even tho it does not matter in a poem,and you flowed acceptionally well,the emotion was raw at every aspect,overall this was a nice read......8.5/10 overall both had some nice reads,both did really good in imagery,but ima say lyric had slightly better vocab and raw emotion so this battle goes to him.......PROPS TO BOTH IN THIS BATTLE,THIS IS BY FAR THE BEST BATTLE OF THE WEEK v/lyric
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01-05-05, 12:15 AM
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IP: F4F0 BA13
blah, i'm not going to take a long time to
break this down because i'm really not in the mood to go into great length about it but yeah Acuity, good verse You had the emotion working for you in all Though i'm going to have to go against the grain here and vote lyric. Even though his wasn't as emotional, in my eyes creativity was what nailed this for him. Dont get me wrong i liked your verse Acuity but no offense it was too predictible and slighty boring no hate though man just had to go with personal preference on this one. v/ Lyric |
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01-05-05, 01:36 AM
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Only the Illist
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IP: 1AF0 6ADD
aight yo this was a DOPE battle.. both of yall had some emotional shit here
Acuity... goddamn that was DOPE dawg... the immagry and feeling in that peice was off tha hook... structure was tight, vocab was great... overall an excelent peice homie, i agree with cali on this one 10/10 Lyric... another dope drop homie... great immagry and feeling as well but yours lacked something... structure was tight as was vocab... i was just feeling acuitys verse more.. no hate lyric... dope shit homie as always 9/10 VOTE- Acuity no hate |
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01-05-05, 03:13 PM
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STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 5671 DBDD
3-2 aciuty this was a good battle
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01-05-05, 09:19 PM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: 28AD 5545
acuity wins 3-2
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