I cry everynite just to sleep.
what am i to do?
I can't run, can't hide.
The past keeps haunting me.
scarying me attempting to come around,
seek revenge upon me.
My sould is weak. I'm begining to breakdown.
Can't escape this shadow its always around.
Gives off a fearful aura. scared to close my eyes
can't seem to find peace
every where i go death seems to follow.
Taking the lives of my friends and family.
It has me living and finishing this life alone

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Hmmmmm, ok lil imaginary, but you needs to elevate on that. Nice emotion though, kid keep doing like that and your bound to be a good poet writer. I like the rhyme scheme you used, but keep using that rhyme scheme, and add more description and feelings on-to your poem's. It might be short but it holds a bigger amount of emotion.

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This showed your emoiton,but vocabulary wise,this could have been better, just take a chance and let the words pour out,and don;t stop yourself or cut it short,if you feel something,don't hold back,like i felt you did here. overall it was a nice drop, keep working at it..1

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