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Old 01-16-04, 05:28 PM   #1
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At That Point(plz give feedback)

IP: 40AD 16C8

Im at that point where im losin focus,
where life is hard and seems rather hopeless,

Im at that point where nothin has meaning to me
where things dont look as they seem ta be,

Im at that point where the my vision seems ta get weezier,
where i only do things if other ways arent easier,

Im at that point where i crack at dat joint.
fuck life and struugle, im at that point,

gimme some feed back this is only the second poem i wrote so....

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Old 01-21-04, 12:29 AM   #2
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uppin this hit plz gv me sum feedback peeps
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Old 01-21-04, 06:40 AM   #3
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good but work on ur vocab abit and you will elavate
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Old 02-16-04, 02:28 PM   #4
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thnx man i be sure to do dat
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