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01-16-04, 05:28 PM | #1 | |||||||
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At That Point(plz give feedback)
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Im at that point where im losin focus,
where life is hard and seems rather hopeless,where things dont look as they seem ta be, Im at that point where the my vision seems ta get weezier, where i only do things if other ways arent easier,fuck life and struugle, im at that point, gimme some feed back this is only the second poem i wrote so....
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01-21-04, 12:29 AM | #2 | |||||||
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uppin this hit plz gv me sum feedback peeps
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01-21-04, 06:40 AM | #3 | ||||
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good but work on ur vocab abit and you will elavate
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02-16-04, 02:28 PM | #4 | |||||||
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thnx man i be sure to do dat
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