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05-11-05, 04:40 PM | #1 | |||
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On The Way To Greatness
IP: 3240 794D
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2144411
like sharpening a knife, i'm headed to the point of greatness but decapitation has left my mind to my joints relate-less to straighten this, i've hit these curves with an iron fist checking each box as i pass each of the desired list with wires i twist situations around to best suit what my needs be i ain't a robin hood, but with force i go around looting the greedy shooting at the bleeding, yall suckas don't even deserve the life taste my greatness to be as i begin to serve this knife to nerves i strike with more than words as weapons i've hit the scene so hard it's like i've blurred the settings curse the forgetting, cuz you'll never see success again i'll never be a ghost after life, cuz i possess the end suppress the friends, cuz they'll just wind up getting in the way so hot, they say i match frisco cuz i'm even sweating the bay i'm betting the day will come, all i see are green lights and i don't need to picture composure cuz even my scene writes seen to thing to many times like the game's trying to plant me success looked small but i carried myself on my back, the way envy can't see, but i'll still walk my way through mazes no denial in my steps to success, cuz i don't do phases i view stages only to get tips on how to perform my act i've weathered the truth of greatness as i storm the facts warned attacks, but only so you can see me coming i march to my own beat so hard i even bleed the drumming you won't see me running, but i spin cuz i'm on my way to the top yo big feet could step all over me, but you'll never see the day that i flop made way through stops, cuz i've trampled these signs i never let go and hung around long enough to sample the vines make example by my rhymes, shit i only state the truth never tardy to the board, cuz i was never late to move break the route, but there are no kinda forks in the road i'm bound to burst like i was uncorked to explode extort the modes, fuck it, i've already paid my dues you see me fucking the standards up, that's only cuz i laid the rules never be afraid to prove my worth, these critics have already been defeated so if you see me coming at you, you better be ready to be unseated
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05-11-05, 04:56 PM | #2 | |||||
this time, lets just pretend ur as good as me...
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IP: 0F40 8178
like sharpening a knife, i'm headed to the point of greatness
but decapitation has left my mind to my joints relate-less to straighten this, i've hit these curves with an iron fist checking each box as i pass each of the desired list with wires i twist situations around to best suit what my needs be i ain't a robin hood, but with force i go around looting the greedy shooting at the bleeding, yall suckas don't even deserve the life taste my greatness to be as i begin to serve this knife to nerves i strike with more than words as weapons i've hit the scene so hard it's like i've blurred the settings curse the forgetting, cuz you'll never see success again i'll never be a ghost after life, cuz i possess the end suppress the friends, cuz they'll just wind up getting in the way so hot, they say i match frisco cuz i'm even sweating the bay i'm betting the day will come, all i see are green lights and i don't need to picture composure cuz even my scene writes ^^ right there beautiful start...I was about to say HOF material, which it could still possibly be but then I think u kinda fell off after that...and you merely picked up at the end, but I wasn't feelin it after that... return favour... |
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06-15-05, 09:26 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: ACA5 461C
yo you keep comen with the illest shyt..yo much respect homegurl...keep doen ya thang...remeba hataz hate and theyll neva love
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06-18-05, 09:47 AM | #5 | |||
Classic
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IP: 3240 794D
thx fo da feed i forgot i wrote dis uppin
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06-18-05, 10:29 AM | #6 | ||||
Champion
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IP: 8AFC 011F
shooting at the bleeding, yall suckas don't even deserve the life
taste my greatness to be as i begin to serve this knife to nerves i strike with more than words as weapons i've hit the scene so hard it's like i've blurred the settings curse the forgetting, cuz you'll never see success again i'll never be a ghost after life, cuz i possess the end suppress the friends, cuz they'll just wind up getting in the way so hot, they say i match frisco cuz i'm even sweating the bay i'm betting the day will come, all i see are green lights and i don't need to picture composure cuz even my scene writes ^^^^^^^ Best bit....ma this was hot...i loved this imagery...structure...this hot....9/10....RTF..on my OM called BATTLEFIELD SCARS.....link in sig
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06-18-05, 04:54 PM | #7 | ||||
Flyweight
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IP: 3450 F354
yepp anoda gd drop frm u,,, u gt talent girlll...... hot #### holla
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06-18-05, 04:57 PM | #8 | ||||
Flyweight
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IP: 3450 F354
p.s .......... drop a reply to dis plz....... return d favour... tnx ~1~
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=195552 <-- clik link |
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06-18-05, 05:22 PM | #9 | |||||||
Ill Nigga Alert.
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IP: 3240 794D
Nice drop girl....Fa reel had some good vocab...imagery...had a good conecpt...n all that...And also you had a good structure n all easy to read...overall: 9.2/10...Keep up tha good work girl....
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06-18-05, 07:54 PM | #10 | ||||
New to RV
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IP: 074B 22E7
nicely done. most multis weren't forced, wordplay was good, also. However, some words seemed a little forced, like when you said "unseated" i knew u meant run away, but it just sounds kind of odd, u know? Some lines seemed irrellevant to the rest of the verse, like "made way through stops, cuz i've trampled these signs" < i get what signs you're refferring to when you say 'stops,' but it just seems like it's the kind of line that would have a double-meaning to it. Vocab was good, but it could improve. Overall, it was a very nice drop. Peep mine please and thank you
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