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Old 09-11-04, 01:35 AM   #1
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-fallen Friend-

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-fallen friend-

you were racing down highway 41 ,car to car
suppose to exit off but never made it that far
the car got outta control started running like shit
having fun one moment,the next your car flips
thats bullshit,you were the only one pinned under neath
the only thing sticking out was your feet
and while i was at home sleeping
my homie my friend was stuck in a car bleeding
the 2 others made it out of the car screaming out of stress
when the ambulance came you fell into cardiac arrest
i cant gettit off my chest..
i should of been there,to encourage you not to race
now your laying in the E.R with blood all over your body and face
next day get a call from my cousin saying get the news paper....cant believe what i read
seen the 4 lines that said 18 year old is dead........

-pauses-

i cant believe what im hearing,this is crazy
then gotta call from his mom crying and stating-
why did god have to reach out and take my baby away
crying my self coudn't think of the words to say
my friends life was tookin ,hes now da-ceased
*whispers*mah homie JAYTEE rest in peace
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Old 09-11-04, 11:31 AM   #2
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aww, i'm so sorry about you're friend, racing huh? i'ts popular up here in NY too, this was a well written piece to say the least, and i'm glad you can release this off your chest, it's one step closer to excepting this, well done, and keep ya head up!
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Old 09-11-04, 07:51 PM   #3
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Thanx Very Much
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Old 09-11-04, 08:07 PM   #4
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shyt's rough... i lost plenty of friends in NY due to different shyt.... my man Rob just started college and was playing ball in the gym.. collapsed and died right there on the court... my other boy got shot answering his doorbell...point blank range in the chest... died in my man Wayne's arms... i know how it feels to lose a friend... shyt's rough... glad to see ya doing sum'n constructive with ya pain and keeping his memory alive for all who loved him... good shyt, yo!

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Old 09-12-04, 09:40 PM   #5
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thanx uppin for more feed
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Old 09-13-04, 10:07 PM   #6
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this is a good poem
and i need feedback man
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Old 09-15-04, 12:07 AM   #7
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Old 09-15-04, 12:11 AM   #8
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damn...dat is some really deep shyt...nice vocab and flow...not much more 2 say otha than i'm sorry fa ya loss...peace 1
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Old 09-15-04, 10:47 PM   #9
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Old 09-16-04, 03:54 PM   #10
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Feeling that,,. Nice work V thats shits hard to come to terms
with. I was in a crash racing about two years ago, I stoped
after that shit..

R.I.P JayTee

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Old 09-17-04, 11:33 PM   #11
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nice drop dawg, I have a brother that races and we had some close calls and its hearin stuff like this that makes people see its not all about credibility, death is involved. But very nice drop could tell you ment it by the lil captions sayin "puases" and "whispers." I really like this, and I see its a tuff subject to write about. So I will pray for ya and ur family and ur friends family. But one things fa sure, you hafta keep ya head to God and pray man, God Bless, nice drop.

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Old 09-17-04, 11:56 PM   #12
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R.I.P. Jaytee.. Valor that poem was very emotionally relieved.. you have truly out-done yourself.. nice drop RV's Poet (the real one).... not just a story it's life, keep up ya work..
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Old 09-21-04, 12:28 AM   #13
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Dats messed up about ya friend dawg...this piece did him justice cuz it was very well written I can feel the emotion of it, imagery was great, I liked it...u really put emotion in it an dat alwasy shows thru.
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Old 09-21-04, 12:29 AM   #14
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Old 09-21-04, 12:53 AM   #15
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wow valor...your better then me? how'd dat possible..lol j/p.. but wow... this was a hot piece..i could actually picture wut was happen'n whilre reading it...wish there were more poems liKe dis in da future
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