yea..jus 3 verses i wrote b4..spit to a ill beat....came out pretty nice tho


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HELLLZ YEEAHH !!!!

LoL wtf @ the intro... that was weird as hell...

Iight... Beats simple but perfect since you just plan on spittin

Whoa man... breath control... i can hear like every breath you take...

Flow seems mad forced lyrics are cool, but your just kinda throwing multis together it seems like

2nd Verses flow bit better than the first but the 2nd half is kinda ehhh again

DAMN you did it again on the last verse lol, you started off nice than you switch it up and it sounds forced mang...

but LMAO @ "Mmmmmmmmmm kaaayyy"

you got your own swager and shit which is cool... but you really need to work on a constient flow

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"Only god can judge me, but I'm atheist so you do the math..."

intro is different its weird but its cool flow is on then off a little bit then back on
2nd verse crazy multis alot of punches in this verse i liked it flwo is jsut kinda off cause you wrote it without the beat

this definately isnt your verse lyrics are nice flwo was kinda off lmao at the mmm kaayyy line
pretty cool track

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...POPs,shud have filtered it a lil!

the way u flow is okl...sorta like ranting or something like that,it kinna takes ur flow off but at the same time is iight!
yeah i'm feeling ur rhyme scheme,u had some multis too that were pretty tight
beat is okay..just smooth!

lmao@ last lines on verse 3...nice nice!

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lol, no doubt...and yvonne i know i owe u some feed to, ima get @ ya

and my roomie broke my mic stand so i was jus holding it here LOL

thx for the feed
1ne

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HELLLZ YEEAHH !!!!

oh no, my boys back...haha some good points and bad points, ya got more confident on the mic, but your flow falls off at times, just keep it together n its gettin really ill

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lyrics im feelin....flow is unique....

lmao mmmmnn kkkk

heard some wordplay in there.....good wordplay....loads of multis......yea i can hear ur breaths to but psshh whateva......least its a sign that u breathin
im feelin ur presence when u spit.....its like.....ur a mix of ummm aesop but with better delivery and concepts simple enough to understand

ok, spoken word after those few bars are kinda gay... you just goin on about blah..weird laubgh and shit, but blah.

First verse, is ok.. "spines get crushing" ran out a breath there, which kinda wrecked those solid bars.
Shit talk is a ok touch I spose.
Second verse is ok, nice rhymes, flows stays on point. Some ok punches.
end a this verse is cool.
shit talks a bit stupid now..lol...
next verse is ok..mmmkkaaayy shits is gay
overall its cool.

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=237068

beat is dope, lovin how u come right in BEFORE the intro..Really feelin' the beat..Lyrics are dope, but random as fuck. AH, THAT WAS THE POINT! Nice. Where did you get this fucking beat? Overall, dope track. Send me this beat, homo.

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shook me with that intro. i really like your voice. got a nice swagger. a little off beat on the first verse. i like the lyrics though. i guess you were staying true to the song title. the beat is dope. the second verse is dope. i like that same sex marriges line. you flipped that nice. the only thing that kinda bugs me is when i can hear you sucking up your spit every now and then. quality seems nice. im feeling this track. almost downloadable. i thought you were done, but nope third verse. the train conductor line was nice. never heard anything like that before. good track.

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