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Old 01-28-04, 06:35 PM   #1
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SkiddZ N' Dev Collab: Earths Judgement

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God was displeased with the world, and had regretted ever making it. But he didn't want to destroy it off, so he set up a Court for the Planets Judgement. He chose Life to defend the earth and Death to go against it. They both presented their Pleads as follows..

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Life:
So Innocent, The unfortunate people dealin with the past of others.
Which has Passed the others, since the first killing of Cains Brother
We cannot help it, God knew that the world would have been sinful
Falling into Pitfalls, humanity, soon enough will lead to they own fall
Unfortunately, instead of facing their fate when the right time Comes
They are Judged, And their fate set, Before the dawn of The young Sun
In which the SUN will set, And the other SON Will Find His rise
But Humans, even with sin have predicted Jesus’ Coming the 2nd Time
Give them a chance, Let them know what fate you Have set for them
Given their roots of Adam N Eve, Its hard to cut that off from their stem
The world is at its peak, And they have almost reached their inevitable Dawn
Kill them now, and who knows if they relished life that you have gave them
The Lord is My shepherd, But the sheep are still are beginning to wander off
Death just wants them to die, to give the Grim Reaper a Needed Vacation
I can help out, I gave a follower named John a ‘Book of their Revelation’

Death:
The Jurassic, crustaceous and Neolithic where times of calm
When the world only had nature to inflict planetary harm
Without Qualm it was healthy in a natural existence
Without emissions, a wealthy organic state of resistance
No mechanical devises, for instance no nuclear reactors
Influencing factors draining resources to gain things faster
It’s a global disaster spawned from primate evolution
Cos leaving the planet scorned is our main contribution
To mixed up in progress, inflicting a slow death,, misusing
Cos another human another Contusion, like metaphoric bruising
To the planet that’s losing the battle cos its taking the brunt
From a deadly pathogen let lose on a technological hunt
Cos we confront and conquer, with a wake of destruction
Now introduction to other planets, then it’ll be production
But holidays in outer space, wouldn’t make it thru customs
A higher power would intervene the disease and crush them
An end to earth so the universe escapes,, human combustion

God has Made his decision, but only a choice few know. I must tell thee, Repent now, the Sun is about to set..
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Old 01-28-04, 06:43 PM   #2
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WOW....now this here is dope...you guys broke it down perfectly...I don't even no what else to say????...I'm gonna put this up for OM of the month..(although mine and Sub.D's collab's gonna be tighter)..
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Old 01-28-04, 07:41 PM   #3
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Yeah..it's hard to say anything else on this piece except it was completely dope
SkiddZ..hmm..liked how you approached life..thought the lines were a little stretched but it didn't affect anything so it really didn't matter..just looking for something to say..
Dev..great vocab..again..nothing much more to say..this piece was just dope..I'd nominate it for that monthly thing..but Penskills already did..dope
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Old 01-28-04, 07:44 PM   #4
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thnx... reading it back thru... as a whole i like it.....
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Old 01-29-04, 02:50 AM   #5
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come on.... whats with the sleeping
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Old 01-29-04, 02:54 AM   #6
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Dope. . Not Much you Can About This Piece Right Here. . Skiddz, Dev. . You Both Did Your Parts VERY Ill-like. . Skiddz, Flow Was A Little Off. . Watch It. . Dev, Your Shit Was Flawless. . Vocab Was Great, Flow Ws On-Point. . Both Of You Just Dope-a-fied This All Up, Very Impressive. . Pz.
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Old 01-29-04, 04:28 AM   #7
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SKiddy nice to see u droppin .. havent read lateley, .. but this was nice from both, ncie collabo here, ncie vobac usage flowed good.. & u worked good together in this collab, .. i feld this piece, .. keep it up holmes, ..
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Old 01-29-04, 04:47 AM   #8
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very nice piece, a joy to read, you had topic, flow, vocab nearly every thing in this peice. so like every1 else sed, this woz completly dope.
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Yay, they like it!!! they really like it!!!
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Old 01-29-04, 11:23 AM   #10
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for a collab it is a cut above most and i like the life/death spittin its been done bare times but this is a top 5 collab...

nice..

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thnx people... its all appreciated....
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Old 01-30-04, 05:40 AM   #12
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any more,.,,,
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I'm more than impressed fam... fuckin good job...
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Thank You..
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very nice...i won't say impressive because i already knew you had skills...dev your piece was almost perfect...the flow was prfectly paced...never had a second to take a breath and stop readin..skiddz some of your lines were stretched but your verse was extremeely effectual at addressign the topic, you never lost sight, dev gto lost in the rhyme a few times..but you kept the rhyme tight and kept defendin your point...the intro and outro are uneccessary...btu that's really up to you...maybe the intro shoudl stay, the outro eh...im not sure, anyway taht's my only real criticism...excellent drop..but like pen said...we're gonna be better..lol
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