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Old 09-19-07, 06:07 PM   #1
Brydon
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From: your wifes last home
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fuck a 50 cent i want 50 grand,im so much taller when i stand,
dont need ta expand,i sound so much better with 2 swallon glands.
i write kind,i blow ur mind,id never be like him and take it from behind.
u choke and wonder y i prevoke,i place u all in the bracket of being a joke!
im setting the standard,but u's the 1's born with hope,i only do dope,but still get more respect then old folk.
dont listen to fat cats,coz there liars,
all there gud at is gud die'rs,gay admirers.
all i meet is cold feet,i wonder y in the game there so deep,but it dont take a genious that there working with the old dirty beat.
i put rappers on there seat,dont need to cheat,iv even got the gate recietes,
all achieved on a bad week.
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Old 09-19-07, 08:33 PM   #2
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eh.....structure is a no no here

try doin it like so...

rhyme like this and maybe itll appeal to most//
and if u got that crack times 2....give em a dose//

or

in other case u can leave the slashes out
and just floss ur structure like when cash is out

metaphors and similies help to spicin ur ish up......flow was coo....but u need a lil flavor....concept is played but w/e peep my silent treatment piece if u need some examples of metas and similies and wordplay
 
Old 10-11-07, 12:50 PM   #3
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