shatter the atmosphere with oversize hammers//
a rise in static, electrucute the movement in rappers//
im the answer to your question, literature word wrestling//
wrecking sentences from da ayura scripture verse book second//
tearing ya fabric with my inter-galactic passage//
summon juices, spit mucus and leave you plastered//
risen summoned beasts with the saber-tooth tiger athelete//
claws sweep you mopheads tearing flesh like a 1000 mice on wheat//
rapping acrobatic feats jumping the inter-planetery massive//
the master bomberman expert from the blast chambers//
i drop with shrapnel ranging across miles spitting razors//
enter earth as my battlefield with a 20 kilometre shields//
protuding fire wheels from my liquid swords that i weild//
leave planets open from explosions from my moaning//
plucking off land, woulda thought pluto is a chicken roasting//
super novas explode like jet motors inside a dynamite poster//
cus when you see me, its all nuclear with the size of jupiter//
leave a ringing in between ya ears, propaganda text//
by the time you read this sentence, i already know your existence//
im the mystic, my skin reflects all physical objects//
mutant hybrid, half human - half cockroach, word infesting//
curse blessing a devil angel busting holes in rappers like bagels//
and this peice is all keyed, i rip in peace//
undertake cemetries, decease the deceased//

def feeling this verse......nice.had a lot of anger in it but it flowed sweetly........................................... ............

thanx for the feedback, uppin on this key

uppin this peice

Yeah good shit here, with a dark feel to it. Good flow and nice vocab. Good entry line. Could have had a harder closer, but that was good for this type of pices. Keep that fire and use it to drop more... Good piece.

Check out my open mics, "She's gone now" and "Off the top."

If you get the time, hit up this battle: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=77400

mos def i will, still uppin on this

just straight spittin... I'm usually into topical verses, but I still feel those battle type ones... that canibus style shit... and yeah, I was feeling this one... had that wordplay, that aggressiveness, and it flowed pretty well... also it wasn't that long so it didn't get monotonous... good shit dawg...
I would now tell you to check out my verse, thas being slept on, but I won't.... thas up to you... lol....

Peace

thanx bruv, still uppin this though

well shit this piece was ill,good wordplay,good vocab,good structure,this whole piece was clean,good imagination,nothin else i can say except KEEP SPITTIN! peace god.~1~

thanx bruv, still open for replies though