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05-05-05, 05:09 PM
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Divine Ascension
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RapVerse EXCLUSIVE!!!
IP: E195 8305
my verse in my Topical Battle that Diman no-showed to
Topic: Lost in a dream wild dummin, lemme find a phone and dial something Call up Quest to find Maps to stop my reckless mile running// B4 he could tell me the smile fronting Style’s coming I look around the booth to find I’m surrounded by vile humming // I’m now gunning, sum how running at light speed Passing the corner of Sleep hoping Awake will find me// It’ll be hard cuz the sights seen are of a riots inciting I mean often I visit the city of Dream but tonight is frightening // Lightning flowing from clouds in bright streams Sight beams followed by Pows! And high screams// So I veer , past the cats a lot of you dogs fear, To map legend with thousand dots all saying “you are here”// But what is clear is everywhere is nowhere at the same time So I walk like tossing clocks into garbage to waste mine// Dodging mis-steered vans which litters a trail of beer cans Eyes hear so many horns you’d think it was deer land// Hit the rocks fast when I’m ducking while shots blast Hooker transactions, only time I’m seeing one “Cop Ass”// Stop fast, mouth grasped as seen malign causes Clocks gasp yet mine gags at the thought of time pausing// Now I’m launching feet across the floor’s blocks Towards an exit sign only to find the door’s blocked// So I force rocks and boulders out of my path Arms up, palms out, push just gotta follow my hands// what hollowed my plans was the brick wall w/ no door spun 360 degrees to notice I’m surrounded by four more// stuck with a “Ring” like the “Hobits in Mordor” so I begin digging within like searching for core ores// somehow I’m suddenly brought in to town the City of Dream where I’m lost but hope to be found//
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 -Transcending The Heavens- I am before before... Before death is eternity, After death is eternity. There is no death, only eternity. And I be riding the wings of eternity...  ___________________________________________  3 Poems.:.3 Features.:.3 Weeks Consecutively I'm a Bad Man |
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05-05-05, 05:22 PM
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cant mess wit Succes one of the best in the midwest
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IP: 6C4F 88DD
That was really good I give it a 8/10. The puch lines were the best to me. I thought the flow and rythm was good too, nice wordige (wordige is like the ryming words) I dont get why you named the title this though? I guess to make people look at it. Any ways it was good
one a the best |
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05-05-05, 05:23 PM
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cant mess wit Succes one of the best in the midwest
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IP: 6C4F 88DD
check out my club banger leave some feed
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05-05-05, 05:27 PM
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Divine Ascension
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IP: E195 8305
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-Transcending The Heavens- I am before before... Before death is eternity, After death is eternity. There is no death, only eternity. And I be riding the wings of eternity... ___________________________________________ 3 Poems.:.3 Features.:.3 Weeks Consecutively I'm a Bad Man |
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05-05-05, 05:34 PM
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cant mess wit Succes one of the best in the midwest
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IP: 6C4F 88DD
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^^^^^^^^^ hard shit thats my fav. line |
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05-05-05, 06:22 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
damn that shit was dope man it was just plain crazy keep up iight i give it a 9/10
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