ayo....
a menace wit mine//a dentist at times//crack ya in the mouth like several times//nuff blunt force trauma to sever ya spine//clever wit, lines my mindstate?,the boy been upstate wit the shanks and the wine//a fuckin ruffneck,fuck respect cuz u know dat state time...don't give it to me mufucka uma take mine//no time to waste, never know when my times up//ain't talkin bout death,i'm on parole til 09 fuck//still give u a cold nine or snub to da temple til ya whole mind is sludge........


off tops

Man, you're DOPE.

But seriously, you need to work on everything. Practice.

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good look and advice homie

you need some structure bro, flow is off often, build your lines like this:

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ya know what I meen, keep dropin

see why cant we have more new people who take constructive criticism this well? but yea the first thing u need to work on is your structure, if u continue to drop open mics we'll go from there.and u need to leave feed on two other OM's and then post the links here or this will be closed

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C.S.

...Is to have Served Your Faction

at least you got multies so it flows koo

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THE TRUTH IS I'M BETTER THAN YOU

You need to leave 2 links to other peoples open mics that you have left solid feedback on.


I will leave feedback once you have posted your links.