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10-08-05, 08:57 AM | #1 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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Take A Stand
IP: 46C2 FF91
Spoken Word-ish...
Take A Stand
In a dark and shaded chamber Far away from humanity Such obscure, hypocritical shadows Numbed by a sudden rush of power Decided to stay blind To all those ending lives Deafened by their pride Not hearing children cry Eyes focused on the future Never on the present Nor the past Maybe that is why we never seem to learn from our mistakes Like an avalanche A mere snowflake Molded by human hands By time transformed Into a distastrous mass Or should I say mess? Poverty rages Yet wealth is all around In the pockets Of our world leaders Who refuses to act But just sit still Now we, the people, need to unite as one and take a stand Screams fill the streets Not of pain this time But of anger Combined forces Fighting for one cause To save our society From sharks To prevent them From eating us The small fish Speak on blunt truth On top of your lungs Be proud Be strong Don't fear no one Dare Dare to take a stand Left feedback to: My Life Vol 1 by .Ex. Gone by riddlemethat
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10-09-05, 04:47 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 5285 DC82
good read... i liked the imagery you used...really kept my attention the entire way thru.
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10-10-05, 01:44 PM | #3 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 11AF 50EC
good shit! lol i can FINALLY postneways; luved da imagery ya used, which is in about every one of ur pieces ive read so far lol; but dis was a good joint fo sho; keep up da good work...1
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10-18-05, 10:39 AM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: A604 EE64
hey yo i gotta admit i really liked that peice it had good imagery, good vocab and nice structer although it was a little off with structer but i could tell where everything was supposed to go or how it was supposed to be worded so i gave you credit for structer...if you would please leave some feed on my poems.....THANX
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10-23-05, 02:00 PM | #5 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: B16B 0FE9
^Returned the feed...
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