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02-25-08, 12:25 PM
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Real Talk, real niggas relate... Keystyle
IP: B5B3 F18F
Tryin somethin new
Most rappers post n propose hoaxes-n-boast// about alotta folk tales n dont actually do those-notice// me im more farocious, molded into a real brotha n i dont focuse on haters n those that stay foldin// im tryna get promotion, ben real n gone stay that// shit who knew that emcees could earn money off of staight fact// i keep em commin i see sumthin i want n i reach fa it// goals that aint ben taught to b caught cant be cluthed-n-squeezed so fuck it// i do me, i do my own thing see i am not of your means of nessesary roughness just so the public can believe// g all i gotta do i speak people will understand and relate cuz if u cant u just wasnt meant to be// please runnin wit niggas that cant lose, i am, i can, spray dude// but why lie, i wouldnt kill if i didnt have to// run up on, armed, blast u n erase limbs// dis-attach parts upon my discharge of hollow tips// nigga nuts like cashews, mad like i've been violated// keep my adrenaline pumpin like im in a 200 story high elavater// rushin frum top to the first, prodigy'll verse// n imma b me till i die n im in a hirsch// nigga feed please.. lol
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02-25-08, 12:27 PM
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IP: B5B3 F18F
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=245508
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=245425
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02-26-08, 04:24 PM
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Herb
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IP: CE76 E868
yah i really didint like this drop at all pretty blah got boring fast and stayed boring nothing good rreally to say about it work on ya structure sum maybe spend some more time on the ish 3.5/10
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03-03-08, 08:27 PM
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IP: EF0F C437
yea...just try to come with smethin more creative..but its overall...decent
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03-03-08, 10:56 PM
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IP: 688D 5F20
yea this verse was pretty crappy wasnt it.. i dont know.. was tryin sumthin new.. lol
i guess uppin
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03-10-08, 12:32 AM
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IP: 28AD 5545
Don't take any feed back from anyone negatively. It's just constructive criticism that will make you better in the long run. But yeah, you should really take your time on your pieces, put more thought, some creativity and you'll have a good piece. This peice was ok, flow was kind of everywhere, structure was off, but the rhyme shceme was getting there. I'll be waiting to you see your next drop.
Keep Writing.
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03-23-08, 09:41 AM
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ehh
IP: FB71 7584
seriously mayne dont take that shit from anyone. Just keep on goin writin and elevatin. You can tell you tried on this peice becaues you actually tried something other than the oh so common monosyllable rapping style that most people love. So good drop for that mayne 6/10 just keep elevatin.
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