the vision is clear, this isnt my year, my decision is near
should i shot the pistol in the air, or let my demon bring-in the fear....
look in the rear, all i see is piers bleeding from they neck and they ears
from this guy who holding a pistol and beer, u'll get a fist full of cheer's...
im trying to make this as crystol and clear, im rageing in war
with steam smoking from teens joking like its outragous to draw...
my MurDah ways are contagious to all, my punches brake cages walls
spit straight k's and fours, leave u stiff... to stay in the morge...
guns flameing the floor, blood draining and all
out the mustage, i bust thing's, that'll leave ya brain on the door...
im incyan with the raw, leaving ya girl wide open like hall's in the mall
ya quick to call the law, go-ahead i'll be waiting while im grabing my balls...
waiting for a victom to pass so i can start stabing he's jaw
with hes people there,
so while im weaving the hit's they'll be catchin bullets like im passing the ball..
louiseanna even know i'll shot whoever ya think blessed, pastor and all
blunt being pass from a dead man in a cass,
the blunt turn off, so i starting stomping that ass throu the floor
wait i think its me triping, got me thinking if it's really me slipp'ing
tryed to snap out of it then cought my hand heat-grip'ing...
blank out and realise that my feet sticking, feel like this beef chicken
someone droping singles in here, i guess hes tricking...
because when it comes to tracks there only 1 who keep riping
Murdah, who's confused if im just to commited to it,
or to into it that i feel like im living throu it...

It'z MurDah.....

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wasnt really feeling it stopped reading half way thru..work on your vocabulary

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^^^ point taken...

but it wasnt soppuse to be complex it was a story about my rage aka the killer inside of me...

topical is not my thing thats why im trying to post shit up to elevate myself so any advice i will take so thanks for the advice.....

but do you think the story and the multis was decent or nah??

I think the multi's were good but on some real, do a spell check or sumthing. I was flowin with it till i ran into a few words that i had to think about what was meant. Feel me. I disagree with talksic, you dont really need extravagant vocab in every piece. Some dont call for it. overall i liked it duke. 7.5/10

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^^ thanks man i just did it real quick and didnt bother to check for any mistake but thanks for your feed back man word....

Multi-tastic man, you a fan of big l, lol? A nice little brag verse right here, ok fair enough it wasn't the most original shit i've ever read but sometimes you just gotta hammer out a verse with a 'fuck you' type of feel to it. A smooth read with solid vocab. I'd like to see you expand on your topics, write up something a little more original and more focused on the imagery. But it was a good read though man. I'll keep my eyes peeled for your next one.

Keep posting.

^^^ thanks man getting a comment like that from someone who is sick with topic makes me wanna try harder and like u said focus more on the topic and imagery im digging ur feed back im pretty sure this will help me alot THANKS....

okok..............

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