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Old 12-18-08, 01:12 PM   #1
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Unhappy Hell

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Well I say, Im having a hell of a day...
Nothings paid... I mixed up and shakin like homemade lemonade
Brain is mush..., U can step on me bitch..Just dont push
Isnt this understood, Isnt this good?

Im confused like Im trapped in a room, I cant breath
This mornin walked into a room wit 100 plus peeps...I couldnt think
Couldnt blink, All I hear in my head makes me have a hell of a week
Im so distressed, I cant pass this test, Always fighting w/ her..How cheap?

Noone knows, Inside Im cold and alone, Dead just a decapitated soul
My hearts broke,,,I hear sorry..Sorry...Im living the same day
I hate this same page, this mouth and mind full of rage.
My lifes an empty stage, waiting for me to play

Nobody knows.....Nobody knows.......


My hearts got nails, and my heads got voices
Spikes in the chest, Skull has no notions
No secret potions My head will always collapse...
I just wonder...If my heart...can take all of that

I dont know, I feel like skin and bones, My house is a broken home
Cant pay bills, No christmas....No snow
So tell me what do you know? Holes in my heart..More than my clothes
Im gettin tired...What I hear is SO old.

Fuckin up situations, that are easy usually
Its evident, My evidence Is the voices that speak through me
If I was a Violator...I'd definatly sue me....
Its all a joke.....My whole life...Its just a shame yall dont wanna laugh...Cuz usually thats all they do to me...

Just askin god for forgiveness.....And peace a lil thouroughly



Just lately everyday I feel so sick I could puke, Its no use.
Destroyed inside and everyone thinks its like the flu....How dumb are you?
Schizoprenia Dont go away, Its like a plague..eating me all day
I cant be around groups of people, Too many voices....Didnt do no crime But I STILL PAY

I wouldnt commit Suicide, But damn it feels like Im already gone n such
Already broken, Spirit is crushed...My souls on fire..My heads 2 hot 2 touch
I stare into objects Like they can produce answers
Not even medicine solves it...Its like brain cancer

Im tortured...3/4 of my day everyday...whens My break?
Giving me this illness has made me realize, My birth...was a BIG Mistake
I'm living fake, I act like its ok..But in all reality... I pray 2 never wake
Understand my fate, Live love Laugh..I just wish thats the way Of my make


All these questions....all these comments....HURT ME

If I was 2 go they'rd be no suicide note, No phone calls
I would be burning inside of hell between 4 Hot walls
Its better than the burn I FEEL IN MY SKULL
Backs against the wall...Im tired of listening to all of their fucking talks

It makes me so sick I dont wanna walk, I wanna just be High all the time
Then when I run out they come right back, Hmm is that why I wanna die all the time
Im scared but, I know its not of myself..My fear is......
I will live lonley the rest of my life.... And still listening to what Im hearin
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Old 12-18-08, 01:12 PM   #2
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my 2 links 2 night sry was rushin at hospital
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Old 12-20-08, 05:06 AM   #3
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then again, what title could be good for this piece?
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Old 12-20-08, 06:56 PM   #4
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Old 01-07-09, 03:02 AM   #5
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Good verse. See, the rhyme scheme wasn't forced here, and I just read it like a breeze. Unlike some other OM's I've read, I'm glad you didn't make some Shakespearish type verse, as there's nothing wrong with a little simplicity.

Yeah, keeping making stuff in this style.. 9/10.
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