Sup, thought I would give ya something a taste of my usual ish, jus drop your comments and critique, make sure something is dropped...

Shrouded in the Corner Crumbled by Darkness,
Born to Misery,
He Spawned from A Past and Wished it would've Lasted,
Started in Days of Youth and Left him Bruised,
Physically Marked and Tarnished...
He knew Fists didnt give Answers but Damage,
He was Troubled,
Grasping to Breathe and Asthmatic,
Masked in Anger, the Matrimony he met for Marriage,
Beaten and Punched Every Shot Thrown was Landed,
His Structure Brittle, His Body Couldn't Stand It,
All by his Peers, Abused, Through and Through,
Until One Day he Vanished...
Alone Left In A Panic,
His Days Cold and Frozen with Split Wars against Emotion,
Thoughts When Lifes Been Taught,
Like A Book Thats Been Opened,
All Crafted and Written but Never to be Spoken...
A Victim left with Broken Dreams and he Still Knows Hope is Losing,
Coping with this Renegade by Untying his Tears like Shoe Strings,
Tired of Sorrow, Viewing Tomorrows Blue Prints,
He Knows He'd Never Refuse it,
Screaming to Heaven the Words of the Wounded...

It was Free'd off at the time, jus drop your comments...

Peez...

a free? damn dawg that was good, i kno its crazy when u write shit had depth, u gota ill vocab, lotta words used in there, seen bits of wordplay in there, it was easy to read i enjoyed this piece, it was more poetic to me

i wanna see more, i wont sleep holla

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D.L.W

this was a free nice content for a freestyle dowg rhyme scheme was lil blah at times but it stil solid
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Yeh i feel ya, it is a lot more poetic, keep em coming, appreciated, thanks... Upping this...

Peez...

Again man, you drop anutha hot muthafuckin verse...

Hot As Always..!!

Representin iiS now n forever bruv...no doubt!!

Gotta keep on writin man, its refreshin iLLness..!!

take care

Peace

this thread was hot kid. the line format and flow was nice, it was a deep ass piece, i was feelin' that shit. you got mad skills kid, i'm definetely uppin'... i wanna see one of your battle verses.

this whas hard and i wanna peep out some mo of ya work and thanks fo hollin at my post but holla back

Uppin For My Bro...

yo feelin u start to finish dawg... this a deep piece with nice complexiveness and dope rhyme scheme.... word