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Old 12-25-03, 10:04 AM   #1
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±Clear Skies±

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Look for Clear Skies in Distance with Teary Eyes Persistant;
kept Wishin for Death because when I Wrote none Listened
saw the Visions my Lyriks made Sense; Oppurtunity to Vent;
when Rules Bent I lost Looked above for guidance to be Sent
the Skies Fell collapsed under Life looked down at the Strife;
it Braught me the Life to continue the Ongoing struggle to Write
lost Sight of the Rights I had to continue on in the continues fight
fuck whats Mine I take it all Away all for Days to live for Pay;
Clouded thoughts and Sunless Rays wish but none will be Saved.

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Old 12-25-03, 10:21 AM   #2
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saw the Visions my Lyriks made Sense; Oppurtunity to Vent;
when Rules Bent I lost Looked above for guidance to be Sent
the Skies Fell collapsed under Life looked down at the Strife;
it Braught me the Life to continue the Ongoing struggle to Write

^^That shit thurr is straight up DOpe and Truth....Good Flow..Vocab.....Holla back....
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Old 12-25-03, 10:26 AM   #3
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Last edited by Ackusation : 12-25-03 at 10:33 AM.
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Old 12-25-03, 11:55 AM   #4
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Levitate.
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Old 12-25-03, 12:25 PM   #5
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Words = 7/10
Entetainment=5/10
punches=4/10

Overal = 5/10

elivate
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Old 12-25-03, 12:54 PM   #6
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There were know punches within the pieces you idiot.
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Old 12-25-03, 01:26 PM   #7
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umm some good vocab in this peice and decent flow.......but you need to elivate a bit
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Old 12-25-03, 01:51 PM   #8
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Lmao, upping for someone with more then 1 liners.
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Old 12-25-03, 03:00 PM   #9
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iight, i saw this one a little deep, it had ok vocab, the flow was pretty even all the way thru, id give the originality a 7/10, this was an ok piece, like sed b4, just need to elivate a little bit n ull be the shiznit, iight, peace
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