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Old 09-25-07, 12:13 PM   #46
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Omg your interpretation of my lines makes me think they are something they aren't!

You're GENIUS.
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Old 09-25-07, 12:14 PM   #47
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i can find beats for all my shit lol... u didnt like it??
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Old 09-25-07, 12:14 PM   #48
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Mystic.
both whack as fuck. lol

derek. did u even write that to a beat? if not how do u know it will go to a beat.




It doesn't matter if he wrote it to the beat he'll have to jam it in there anyway.
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Old 09-25-07, 12:15 PM   #49
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ur just combinding words that rhyme. they rnt even good. just quick. youre terrible. if u dont like it LEAVE. its not like anyone here is on ur side. ur just diggin ur self in a hole and burying ur self in horse shit.
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Old 09-25-07, 12:15 PM   #50
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your raps are boring damn and they played as fuck
woulda though i was a chef they way i souffled them up
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Old 09-25-07, 12:17 PM   #51
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ricky whos gonna do the second verse? do u wanna? and ill clean it up with the 3rd verse? or do u want me to do the hooks too and u write the next 2 verses
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Old 09-25-07, 12:18 PM   #52
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u should be lucky im gunna throw in a verse.

u do first and third i do 2nd and hooks. but im not writing shit till u give me a fucking topic and beat.
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Old 09-25-07, 12:18 PM   #53
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im just combining words that rhyme?

God lmfao

okay okay man I agree

I only combine words that rhyme


which means I'm about twice as good as you currently.
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Old 09-25-07, 12:20 PM   #54
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I'll break down your verse.
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call me the lyrical mineral,
i got the most style and plenty of potential,

wtf is a lyrical mineral? What is the virtue of a mineral being lyrical? Why would you be called a lyrical mineral? Mineral and potential barely even rhyme.

my lyrics combined with this game r a needed essential,
u cant take my words cuz ur the lowest of the minimal,

Not only does that not make sense, it implies that you are essential to rap, when obviously it has been around for years before you started doing it.

my behavior is the worst of the cynical,
u can try stealin these lines,
i got many more but keep them confidential,
they r so powerful they can start an influential rap attack,

-_-

a presidential impeachment and vote for the Big D or Ric B,
we the smartest and illest, our style is the chillest,
u can try to beat it but u'll never fulfill this,

...

we're unique like an abstract artist,
u can never step into our scene,
try ur hardest but u'll never get close,
it'll all be a dream and invisible like a ghost,

.......

we the hardest ever and we bringin it down together,
lyrical master minds from january to december,

I guess that makes sense..

my lyrics r so accurate like a bulls eye with a dart,
the doctors and masters of the hip-hop art,
me and Ric B r the owners, ya better check billboards top 100 soon,
cuz we gonne be on top of the charts.

I doubt that even had a flow.




good?

No! So stop acting like you're the most amazing thing in the world and start working on your rapping. You can pop off bullshit about how you're making a rap group and your going to change the world and you can smoke anybody in a battle since you've improved a lot, but that shit doesn't mean a single thing. It doesn't change the fact that you can't even rap decently yet. Less talking, more practicing.
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Old 09-25-07, 12:22 PM   #55
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the topic is being TOP OF THE CHARTS. and i think we should use lose yourself by eminem or gang injunctions by WC as the beat or just put them together in 2 seperates songs with gang injunctions as one beat and the other song with lose yourself as the beat. then see which one sounds better
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Old 09-25-07, 12:23 PM   #56
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Yo' get this piece of shit dnota off this site, why'd you even bring this noob here, he can't rhyme for shit, he thinks big words make him look important

Hes every played punch, pun and sterotype summ'd up in one bum.. Seriously though, your verse was trash, Who in the fuck still rhymse about a "Rap attack" rofl, kid your a herb, you said your 10x better now than you ever were and you still suck, i can only imagine how bad you were
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Old 09-25-07, 12:23 PM   #57
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wait im still confused....are you starting a text group....you said youd drop a verse all i see are some lyrics which terumoto very noteably pointed out was sub par.....please please tell me you are actually making music n didnt waste all this time stickin up for a "rap group" of texting....
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Old 09-25-07, 12:26 PM   #58
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hahahahaa, i love this..

well im not teaching him ne thing..im just giving him a chance to jump on a few tracks.

he's writing his own shit.
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Old 09-25-07, 12:29 PM   #59
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ok bud. i appreciate u takin time to read it and judge it. but jeez i just turned 18.. ive only been listening to rap since i was 12 and the majority has been pac big nas and bone thugs. and they do rhyme... have u listened to the way immortal technique writes, or r.a. the rugged man, or nas, or keith murray, jedi mind tricks, kanye, common, or lupe??? they kinda have the same style but their writing is like 203203840293092382x better and theyve been doin it much longer than me. all i need is practice. shit dude. but w.e i dont care ima stick by the way i want. im stickin to the way i like it. listen to the song ALL IM HEARING by krayzie bone. hes saying that eveyrone is tryna be like some one else and doesnt come with their own stlye. im coin with my own style so im just doin wat i want and wat i like
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Old 09-25-07, 12:31 PM   #60
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goin* not coin lol
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