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Old 11-26-07, 11:29 AM   #1
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"If You Love Me" first track on the myspace.
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normally i dont post my tracks but im proud and diggin the shit outta this one, my boy one the chorus merkin dem vocals, and my quality worked out a lot better than usually.
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see what cha'll think.
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Old 11-26-07, 03:44 PM   #2
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Can't view Myspace on my computer at work, or else I would peep this.
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Old 11-26-07, 03:48 PM   #3
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Old 11-26-07, 03:51 PM   #4
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Old 11-26-07, 05:27 PM   #5
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Listening now...

Love the beat.

Is that you on the hook? Not bad...

Flow was decent...but your vocal quality really hurt this song. Delivery sounded safe for the most part, but it's hard to tell.

You should invest in a new mic, because you can only go so far with bad quality.
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Old 11-27-07, 10:43 AM   #6
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i got that usb co1u mic, i think its fine, its just that i record on a basic laptop with out any type of sound card. cuz the same mic on a better computer sounds better.
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and no thats not me on the hook its my friend i spit wit sometimes, he's stuck wit the singing aspect lately.
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thanx for the replies. and if theres any cool edit mixing stuff u think might help the quality hit me up cuz all i use is the spit clear grafic equalizer thang.
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Old 11-27-07, 03:31 PM   #7
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bored so might as well

hook pretty cool. Vocals should be upped tho. But dude did pretty nice job. Your flow was a bit choppy, vocals maybe could be upped bit too. 2nd verse flow started out kinda ehh, but emotion pretty cool. lyrics seem cool. The "If that's love" part in 2nd verse near end was good idea. But you should of punched in the "if that's love", because you seemed to be rushing in words. The third verse, or bridge or w/e. Unclear what you was saying, and didn't sound too good.

overall it was decent track tho.
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Old 11-27-07, 05:26 PM   #8
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i think it would be dope if your boy did some harmonies in the chorus it would give it more depth n make it stand out as a more powerful chorus
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hook pretty cool. Vocals should be upped tho. But dude did pretty nice job. Your flow was a bit choppy, vocals maybe could be upped bit too. 2nd verse flow started out kinda ehh, but emotion pretty cool. lyrics seem cool. The "If that's love" part in 2nd verse near end was good idea. But you should of punched in the "if that's love", because you seemed to be rushing in words. The third verse, or bridge or w/e. Unclear what you was saying, and didn't sound too good.

overall it was decent track tho.

thanx for the feed back.
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i did punch in on "if thats love" in the second verse. like i recorded those three if thats love parts seperately if thats what that means.
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if i get a chance to record on a better mic i'll def take these suggestion. thanx
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This was nice... I aint that good so I don't really have any critisism...EXCEPT!!! You need to learn to EQ...or get a High Pass Filter VST Plug-in... But yeah...I added you.
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Edit: At the beginning...the banging of the kicks or drums or w/e...made it seem like it was gonna come out to be a song with the famous Phil Collins sample "In the air tonight"... Your boy's pretty nice on the hook though...there's just alot of frequencies that haven't been turned down...and it takes away from the clarity...
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frequencies in the beat need to be turned down? if so i dont know how to do that.
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Old 11-29-07, 12:06 PM   #12
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frequencies in the beat need to be turned down? if so i dont know how to do that.


he's saying you need to equalize the tracks in this song
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