Battle Rules:
topical: what dreams may come...
40-64 Lines
No Crew Votes ( BUT WILL LIKE TO SEE CREW FEED BACK THOU HONESTLY )
No Recycling
No Biting



Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 07-11-08 at 10:17 AM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.


DQ'ed.. stolen verse

Nitrogen has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-08-08 11:52 AM.

dutch has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-08-08 12:24 PM.

What Dreams May Come...

I gaze across an empty sea,
where the ocean meets the ragged sands
these days of loss have emptied me,
bearing broken dreams and shattered plans
wearing open seams in tattered hands, the vestige of Our Creation fades to dust
I gave enough displays of trust to wager just a 'Savior's Touch'
then tainted luck made it rough and through the flames of lust my rage was such
that sadly...the *One Thing* I could never 'Save was Us'
A man built of Gibraltar's Rock, now a landfill that was all for naught
Yet in my Dreams...I see that you stand-still in that altar spot:
your radiance eclipses the sun, you're awaiting this gift as 'The-One'
An Angel on Furlough from Heaven or a lady depicted as one
so I seize your hand and free your doubts, fulfill my plans to be your spouse
'Falling down on both Knees', cuz it's *you*
I 'Can't Stand' to be Without
If it was fate from the start,
then why did Fate put a stake through my heart?
Now I only see you when I close my eyes and wait till it's dark
These fading visions of a flower path slip through
the prisms of the hourglass
with conflicted decisions scripted in the schisms of a sour-past

Every portrait of words that I spoke, brought-us-to-grow-together
Every kiss to your forehead, taught-us-to-know-forever
Every facet of you I cherished, enhanced-this-endless-bliss
Every day we're apart, I long for one more chance-to-send-this-kiss

You captured my heart and soul, but fractured I start to fold
this rapture lies-dark and cold, in the empty
chapters I marked as goals
Now I'm broken-inside and sometimes 'hopin-to-die' as I 'choke-on-my-pride'
our 'Movie Love' was (Reel) if you'd just Open your Eyes:
That pristine portrait in your heart,
you knew that I had etched in place
when we turned-to-'Sky Lovers';
the view through your eyes was heaven's-grace
then eternal tides hovered, as the
moon grew to light your precious face
It orchestrated it's great concerto, the 'symphony of our love' once 'played in its beams'
but fate intervened in a way that has seemed blatant, with its
hatred and greed
it 'awakened a 'scene' from our nightmares' and has 'Taken-this Dream'
You were my Goddess Aphrodite, but the
Gods sent wrath to spite me
I can't 'plod this path so lightly'
when I bear this 'rod and staff-inside me'
Complications of lust divide you,
while promised patience and trust abide to
search the 'stars in your eyes'
for the constellations that must reguide-you to hoose the fan that can blaze these lover's deep fires which fate wronged
so that we may once again
'peruse the planets and bathe each other's desires in lake dawn'

Every portrait of words that I spoke, brought-us-to-grow-together
Every kiss to your forehead, taught-us-to-know-forever
Every facet of you I cherished, enhanced-this-endless-bliss
Every day we're apart, I long for one more chance-to-send-this-kiss





Always and Forever...




I'm still violent though.

alright to break down my verse for slow people who are gonna say its not on topic, its numbered for 3 parts
1-my dream
2-me envisioning my dream coming true
3-the signigigance of the dream to me
like always my line length is all over the place since i consider my topicals to be more spoken word then they are hip hop so i have no steady flow during them. dutch since you dropped so fast i basically went the minimum in order to get done as fast as i could. Good luck homie


1.I not only want stability for myself, but for my son and my new child
so i dream of greatness, even though the act of dreaming is futile
then i think, my whole life my nightmares have become reality
so im bound to see, some form of prosper prior to my fatality
maybe a couple of platinum plaques, fuck it, i'll settle for gold
even if its just a single, but for some reason faliure's enveloped my soul
society's forced upon me the role of dreaming dreams for others to live
and to just accept it while i struggle to support by baby mother and kids
but im not havin it, see to me its not enough just to live
so i hustle bars on the block like its a bundle and rock
but my clocks tickin, so i remove the batteries so as not to waste time
then create rhymes with nothin less then simply great lines thatll garner me face time
I would say im destined for greatness, and me and myself just used to laugh
till all three of us started having dreams that our present is the future's past
see its more than a sick sig line, its also the quote that i live by
I alone will make my visions reality, i dont need Kanye beats just to get by
i dont even really need exposure, all i need is attention
thats the same reason i was in high school doin shows in detention
and why my time in jail was spent perfecting my flow and precision
Im takin the path less traveled, the rest of yall on road for collision
Just give me russsel's ear once, and no record label minion will stop me
ill have every real lyricist behind me cause if hip hop is dead i should be considered a zombie
2.and once one foots in the door, im on a direct mission for stardom
to gain the respect of my fellow man and have all of the women adore him
and those supportin me right now, are the same ones ima be sharing with
all the rest can witness as my vigilance transforms into arrogance
maybe in seven years ill claim to be the best rapper alive
then throw a tour thatll allow me to rip the staples and madison live
or maybe ill master a lie thatll keep my status alive
retreat to a life of seclusion and simply act like i died
go back to a life that'll allow me the freedom to relax wit my wife
watch my sons grow into men, never to have to hustle crack in their life
they'll never have to choose whether to rock bandanas to the left or the right
to have to run from the cops and then hide out for the rest of the night
I dont want either one of them to ever know how hunger feels
or to even know how being poor in the hood during the summer feels
I'd kill before that happens, so its better to just let me make it in rap
and if they let me take over, i just cant see them takin it back
but lets face it and be honest, im never making it big
nine times out of ten my kids are gonna die in the same place that i live
but i still follow my dream passion in hopes of making it true
cause who knows what dreams may come with determination and patiance from you

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C.S.

...Is to have Served Your Faction

dutch...you're a fucking cheat.


http://www.letsbeef.com/cypher_deta...ion=tb&id=25052


I knew you were gonna bite some shit.

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Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate.

"watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox

The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew

you know what's funny...i had a feeling you would cheat....and i didnt get more then 6 lines into that shit before i said to myself..."this is too good for dutch to have written"....and it wasn't even that great....you're just that bad....

you fuckin call us out...like you're on our level....and then you go and bite some shit.

Fuck you..that's extremely disrespectful.


nitro...hot verse man..i'll provide a little more feedback in a bit.

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Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate.

"watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox

The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew

word, bitch move nigga. and i was actually starting to respect you

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C.S.

...Is to have Served Your Faction

nice shit nitro, you got this in the bag baby boy. keep up the great work my crhymie.

let's keep it pushin' fellow battlecats.

...UUUPPPPPPIIINNN''' FFFOOORRR VVVOOOTTTEEESSS!!!!!!!!!


esvee, cee-ess

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