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Old 08-30-04, 08:14 PM   #1
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"Hypocrisy" 1 of my writtens drop some feedback or a verse

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Now...I started smokin Newports, ain't that a bitch
I got so stressed out I think I'm bout to dig a ditch for me
Old school homies, be actin like a grinch toward me
Reach out to the fam, but they ain't got nothin for me
I knew it would come, the day all hell would break loose
Feel like that nigga, 2Pac, when he was in "Juice"
I'ma outcast, straight out blast, cover the body fast, and smash top a nigga, totin them triggaz because I have to
And on my momma, this is FLAWLESS FOR LIFE!
And in the future shit is SIKK, I'm livin life hella trife
Off the pills, gettin lit, thinkin FUCK my BITCH
She thinkin FUCK me too, we been together so long I'ont know what to do
But get drunk everyday talkin bout "Fuck It"!!!
I did all I can, but I guess that wasn't the plan
You can have the "bucket", I'ma take the 6 4
And if you really wanna kno, lose 1, gain 1, its the same story everywhere I go
(chorus) X2 male R&B singer
everywhere I go, I see, so much hypocrisy
and it makes me be who I am
and its clear nobody, understands my mind and why I say
the things that I do, and they don't know all the things that I've been through

See... I got empty Olde E. bottles all over the place
So many rappers in the game, can't find no get in place
So much... beef in my life I could never be hungry
Snake me till I die, you know we ain't real homeys
It feels good to help niggaz come up, I'ont need nothin back
You do your thing, I'ma do my thing, I'ma remain in the cracks
And crevises, tryin to get my feddy shit
Higher than mountains, I stay lifted like Chevy lifts
And I been tryin for years, to build a family full of ryders
Damn it I'm tryin, niggaz take it for granted, they lying
If they say they don't take it for granted
Take they lil fame and vanish, get they lil name and manage
To make a few chips, homeys in business, its all useless
Take advantage, I'll leave you toothless, the truth is
I'm not that good of a judge...
I've been turned on to the Thug Life and havin to plug
you know... its like
(chorus) X2 male R&B singer
everywhere I go, I see so much hypocrisy
and it makes me be who I am
and its clear nobody, understands my mind and why I say
the things that I do, and they don't know all the things that I've been through

(Male R&B singer)
Deceiters and two face, seem to be all around me
Your own actions, may doubt you, cause they tellin me all about you
I keep hearin what you say, but it don't go with your ways
So I guess I'll stay, awat from the same old same, stay focused and doing my thing
My realers, stay rollin reactin on game that we knowin
Ain't never no cause to be showin
And my only problem is is that IIIIIIIIIII
Keep forgettin, that we don't love anymore
And we all just ignore, so its like I said once before
(chorus) X2 male R&B singer
everywhere I go, I see so much hypocrisy
and it makes me be who I am
and its clear nobody, understands my mind and why I say
the things that I do, and they don't know all the things that I've been through

wrote that shit back in Febuary around my Birthday cause of how I was feelin so drop some feedback and/or drop a verse of your own and holla @ ya boy!
aight -1-
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Old 08-30-04, 08:19 PM   #2
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dam dat shit was long but good yo man yall take da time to read dis it makes sense is pretty good 8/10 yo man keep postin, yall vote on my shit donw below
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Old 08-30-04, 08:29 PM   #3
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word fo sho do yo thang mayne keep doing yop thang

~peace~
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Old 08-30-04, 08:29 PM   #4
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this shit was straight....i agree wit him^
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Old 08-30-04, 09:45 PM   #5
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tite homie...nice drop...long as fuck...but tite as hell
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Old 08-31-04, 05:41 PM   #6
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thnx cuz still uppin for more feedback here holla @ ya boy damn it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Old 08-31-04, 06:53 PM   #7
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wow, you went all out in this one it seems, you let your feelings fly, nice drop, i liked your flow and you stayed on point with the concept, nice job.......foreal keep it up....1
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Old 08-31-04, 07:10 PM   #8
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cold drop. You should get a r&b singer and put it on audio. Tight stuff I like what you was sayin in this piece...
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Old 08-31-04, 07:22 PM   #9
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already got it on audio cuz, but I ain't got it on mp3 so I can't post it on RV
but n e way still uppin 4 this shit 2 get some more feedback!!!!!!
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Old 09-01-04, 06:01 PM   #10
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come on now let me get some more feedback peeps aight -1-
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Old 09-01-04, 11:39 PM   #11
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a yo man u just keep spittin hot shit man that was tight keep it up man u doin really good
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Old 09-07-04, 06:48 PM   #12
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yo can I get some more feedback on this shit? damn....
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Old 09-14-04, 08:53 PM   #13
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AIGHT...... don't seem like yall niggaz really give a shit about these OM shitz so fuck it this is the last time I'm uppin this shit if no1 responds
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Old 09-15-04, 11:50 AM   #14
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Once again I enjoy your writing, also the fact that it flows( although the drop on the first link was slightly smoother.) Your stories seem genuine, like u really went thru that shit and that combined with the flow and visual storytellin make for good reading. So this drop gets uh 9/10 from me. Definitely keep at this. Aight 1.
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