8-15 bars
no bitin..............
no recylcing..............
verse due at 6:00

checkin in................................................ ...

Rip Checking In.............................................you Drop First

SHIT I'LL GO
RIP VERSE

I'm going to slauter tray-six starting with you// then when i finish I'm coming for the crew// you see I'll run in your house and grab your mom by the hair// tell the rest of your family to get on the ground so TRAY-SIX beware// unpredictible but ill on this shit// I'm a one man army and aiming for your click// caue ou see i'm a body masucuter// a nigga quick to shoot you// dout make me grab my ruger// and straight take it to ya// so don't think that I'm some lite work// cause i'll get after you like child surport// that right a hard nigga talking that trash// put a bullet in you like miceal jackson in a little boy ass//

on you uppin

A quick one...................

YO..............

nigga when my glock-cocks it'll make you pop-lock/
like joe buddens i make you “drop-drop” get sizzled like pop-rocks/
like a daycare arsonist i burn kids/
when will you learn-kid, here take this beatin cus you earned-it/
ya rhymes remind of a SHERM-HEAD, you worthless faggot/
i'm murderin you son...this verse-is-tragic/
words-is-magic...you maggot you get murked-with-addlibs/
you trash-kid, call you afflack cus you duckin-me/
you faggot, you got a dick...you cant fuck-wit-me/
bitin my style...like nas you “wanna-be-me”/
fuckin cock suckin bitch...get the that cum out ya teeth/

Im breakin my verse down...

1.) Wordplay - Tray 6
2.) Rhyme Scheme's - Tray 6
3.) Switch-Ups -None
4.) Multies (Multy-Rhyming Syllabuls) - Rip
5.) Punches - Tray 6
6.) Personals - None
7.) Flow - Rip
8.) Punctuation - Tray 6

May seem like a bias vote but i enjoyed reading through this. Good battle but Tray just took it.

Peace out

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Thanx dawg, but u Forgot to poll vote^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

yall both did good but i think snypeR got this battle
punches good
personal none that i saw wuz good
structure wuz good
my vote is snypeR

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i just mit murk u next

sniper most respect that shit was on point try to vote on some of my other battles

Lil Rip....Your verse lacked structured, and structure is a key concept in netcee battling, cause the reader wants to flow through your verse..........work on that, and the reast will follow............2.5/10

SnypeR......You mad nice...........your verse was straight to the point........and I like the way you put flow in that short verse...nice.......But I've 100 times better from you.............6/10

Thanx for the props rip............................

hey i give props where props are due be honest i would vote for you to if i could

Lil Rip ~ Toon was basically right, your rap looked more like a short essay or a long paragraph. Need to fix that for sure. Nothing to great really stood out to me, although the ending was good, MJ line. You ok man.

SnypeR ~ Liked your stuff, structure was obviously better, and multis were a lil played out at times but not bad.

TO BOTH, it usually helps with personals if you can make plays on their name somehow. Just a sugesstion.

Vote: SnypeR

Plz hit this back up..
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=116008

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well anyways.. RB's better.

lil rip is wack as hell he cant spit to save his life