I know people been spittin they flows about the war, and this ain't no different. Just my opionin and views on the thought of the chance of being called to war.
yo....peep....

don't ask me why I'm parinoid, its fair to coin
a phrase of outcries from the opressed who share the forum/
when opinons expessed on which religon is blessed
and your dicision is stressted on this country's vision of threat/
..take a walk wit me....denied, decived,
discraced, dishonored then changed to myrters, just heartless/
in my own community where strong unity
is scared, shit.. already sat through 20 funaral songs by puberty/
And I may be the next soon, tell the mailman
please expell plans of draft letters in my mail, man/
I suoport the troops already there no dought
but the low drought in this land me makes me dispute this whole route/
I, the prodogy was born, you say nigga
achieve goals highted from the norm, you say nigga/
time to fight for for this land, you say Afro American
then come back from fightin' through the storm, you say nigga/
So you gotta understand, my stand under the creed
from dark clouds, rainy days, struck by lightning and thunder I bleed/

see to this country it's like....
dafting me is pulling my card, the deck of kings and queens is what it's filled with
shulffing me out to ease your hand, less you have to deal with/

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yo dawg thiz was ayte....i think it needed better wordplay....because it was kinda off......well i give thiz peice a 7.9........

Peace*

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Yhea i had a certain beat in mind when I whote this. Common's 6th sence beat by Primo. So I was moaking the lines ft the beat, thats why some shorter and some are longer. even when I'm in text I still spit to a beat 'cuz thats just how I do it. Thats for the reply doe.

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First off, Half of the stuff didn't rhyme.
Other than that your vocabulary expandance was low.
Keep writin, You'll get there.
One Hundred..

didn't rhyme?! I musta thrown people off with the syle I was typing. Some lines didn't go the traditional way like
.........ab
.........ab/

I rhyme alot of the words accents more so than the whole word
like the line where is says

..take a walk wit me....denied, decived,
discraced, dishonored then changed to myrters, just heartless/

I rhymed discraced, dishonored with changed to myrters. If you say it out loud you see how it rhymed. that strong {a} and {r} syllable in the words make it rhyme

I mean the other lines where pretty basic
...strong unity
..songs by puberty/

..mailman
mail, man/

...no dought
..whole route/

in the next couples lines, one line is not gonna rhyme on purposes 'cuz of the rhyme scheam used here.....

I, the prodogy was born, you say nigga
achieve goals highted from the norm, you say nigga/
time to fight for for this land, you say Afro American
then come back from fightin' through the storm, you say nigga/

this is a whole phrase...

prodogy was born
highted from the norm/
**the next line is souposed to not rhyme its just setting up the next rhyming line**
fightin' through the storm/

I rhyme ACCENTS from words alot, just like poets do and call them near-rhymes like somebody said before in a post somewere eles. Pac used to do it alot and Em sometimes too so it's not rare.

Well whutteva, I was just stepin up from the normal rhyme scheam and it's seems like it's hard to translate on type

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I was really feelin' the flow on this.. not worried about draft myself 'cause I live in canada.. but yo, I can understand that view on it.. hey just do what the hippies did and skip the border up here..lol... tight rhyme still, vocab was pretty high qual. fav part was:

"when opinons expessed on which religon is blessed
and your dicision is stressted on this country's vision of threat/
..take a walk wit me....denied, decived,
discraced, dishonored then changed to myrters, just heartless/".... sick multies...

uppin'

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yo people should jus back off the war too many life lost there never goin to find saddam but don't get me wrong it's a good idea to have this war and all but jus back off of it for a bit

well you know what... I felt it... but just to let you know... dont really have to worry about a draft... really... lol... nice peice though OoNnEe

D Dizzle my nizzle fa shizzle....u one of the only kats comin constantly expressin ya own opinions on shit wit skill.....tight shit fam

-Smacks Blunt-Shhhh.
When I started reading it, D-Dizzle..The words were unrhymin.
Not to start beef or anything cause you startin buckin.
But, If that's how you do it, Do you.
One Hundred..

Naw no beef, Its just that you said it didn't rhyme so I was just clearifing to you what was going on in the verse since you missed it. Its cool though, I welcome all opionins.

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Straight up, the whole flow ain't got to rhyme. If every fuckin' line rhymed, it'd be a nursery rhyme... nah mean? You're on point kid, I like the shit. I'm uppin'....