song I wrote and gonna do when I get a mic.

Preserve anger for a handfull of tears.
reminense on all the hate and love from all the years.
nobody sees the shit the way that I do.
Alone I cant take this tears rush from thoughts of shit i've been through.
through my own eyes i've seen it all.
try wittnessing your whole family addicted to fall.
only 7 seein your parents pheen for the thing wishin of that next hit.
its sad to know they got more love for drugs then there own kids.
Grew up thinkin my parents were the everyday mom and dad.
come to figure out what ran there lifes was the drugs they had.
Chorus:
(fuck this drama and the everyday bullshit)
(visons of depression and the people addicted)
(How did I deserve this and why is it me)
(why do I express myself from everything I see.)

this was better than ur other my man.

and i got the whole recording thing mixed up sry about that lol.

uhh you had good points and showed ur struggle...good emotion deff. felt that. work on ya spelling a bit...good chorus idea....a bit more complex and imaginitive then ur other....flow still a bit wobbily other than that pretty good.

hit me back with some feed on mine..peaec

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A LIFE OF CHRYME

I didnt like it for a lot of reasons.

1. It's very simplistic.
2. Your vocabulary is terrible.
3. You don't convey emotion well.
4. The subject is completely cliche.

Work on those things.

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