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Old 03-23-09, 08:02 PM   #1
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Camarac vs Jonathon

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Old 03-24-09, 11:29 AM   #2
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checkin in..........
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Old 03-25-09, 05:49 PM   #3
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yeah check
probably not goin over 16
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Old 03-26-09, 12:38 AM   #4
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Hell nah, i'll edit my real verse in..

i thought this was due tonight, but you changed the date.

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Old 03-26-09, 06:09 PM   #5
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His songs are trash,the type that never plays in your head
So like spiderman His music will only ever "stay on the web"
Coz really, theres nothing to him..how can this whore stop me
my battleraps will kill him so no need for an autopsy...
ima judging this guy is weak so ima snap him like a pencil
This is the court of law anything you say can and will be used against you
this cocky cunt could get worn down and tossed in the dumps
watch hhim get ground to the grain like this involved coffee cups
i'll murder him quick..close your eyes because you shouldnt watch
have you heard the term "measure to fit"..it applied to your wooden box


I'll own this guy...forget human rights i wont make him my slave
coz his career wouldnt blast off if i knocked him straight into space
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Old 03-27-09, 11:42 PM   #6
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lol.. wow..

dude, your not a thug & in this deal I'm the dope one, so just stop it
cuz I promise, you can flip those 100 times and you'll still never profit.
camarac is tasteless so please watch as I'm just bashin' his face in -
cam'd have some sexy thoughts in his head if he had arac to replace his...
your internet - you're scared n' shit and its obvious your shit is really soft
you couldn't dot COM cuz he knocked you out 2nd round of the playoffs.
this is jon, you'd be wrong to think i'm the one you'll be shittin' on;
cuz the chances of you winnin's like the tournys chance of livin' on.
i'd callem a fuckhead but he'd never have luck in bed - he'll never be sexn'
unless i robobox his head and leave his whole fuckin' neck erected...
your no celebraty; fuck trump cuz i'll be the first to leave you fired
i'd deflate this dick, pokin' holes in this prick'll leave'm no choice but retire

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Old 03-27-09, 11:49 PM   #7
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ima judging this guy is weak so ima snap him like a pencil
This is the court of law anything you say can and will be used against you

(played concept, but cool flip)

His songs are trash,the type that never plays in your head
So like spiderman His music will only ever "stay on the web"

(cool concept, needed different wording.)



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camarac is tasteless so please watch as I'm just bashin' his face in -
cam'd have some sexy thoughts in his head if he had arac to replace his...

(Decent)

your internet - you're scared n' shit and its obvious your shit is really soft
you couldn't dot COM cuz he knocked you out 2nd round of the playoffs.

(Alright personal, could've been worded better.)

this is jon, you'd be wrong to think i'm the one you'll be shittin' on;
cuz the chances of you winnin's like the tournys chance of livin' on.

(Lol, decent)



Cam - you had a few good lines, a couple cool flips, but you also had a couple fillers and lines i wasn't feelin all the much.

Jon - Not bad at all, a couple cool punches. You did have a couple ones i didn't like all that much as well, but you had the more enjoyable verse overall.


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Old 03-28-09, 06:33 PM   #8
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His songs are trash,the type that never plays in your head
So like spiderman His music will only ever "stay on the web"
this was pretty generic but not bad
Coz really, theres nothing to him..how can this whore stop me
my battleraps will kill him so no need for an autopsy...
no
ima judging this guy is weak so ima snap him like a pencil
This is the court of law anything you say can and will be used against you
na
this cocky cunt could get worn down and tossed in the dumps
watch hhim get ground to the grain like this involved coffee cups
not really hitting
i'll murder him quick..close your eyes because you shouldnt watch
have you heard the term "measure to fit"..it applied to your wooden box
again not really hitting
I'll own this guy...forget human rights i wont make him my slave
coz his career wouldnt blast off if i knocked him straight into space
weak


dude, your not a thug & in this deal I'm the dope one, so just stop it
cuz I promise, you can flip those 100 times and you'll still never profit.
not hard hitting
camarac is tasteless so please watch as I'm just bashin' his face in -
cam'd have some sexy thoughts in his head if he had arac to replace his...
this was cool, not a hard hit but creative
your internet - you're scared n' shit and its obvious your shit is really soft
you couldn't dot COM cuz he knocked you out 2nd round of the playoffs.
ok I guess, weaak though
this is jon, you'd be wrong to think i'm the one you'll be shittin' on;
cuz the chances of you winnin's like the tournys chance of livin' on.
na
i'd callem a fuckhead but he'd never have luck in bed - he'll never be sexn'
unless i robobox his head and leave his whole fuckin' neck erected...
not feeling
your no celebraty; fuck trump cuz i'll be the first to leave you fired
i'd deflate this dick, pokin' holes in this prick'll leave'm no choice but retire
na


I thnk Jon took this with a bit more crativity and freshnes.
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Old 03-29-09, 06:50 PM   #9
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His songs are trash,the type that never plays in your head
So like spiderman His music will only ever "stay on the web"
what songs? are you recycling? this wasn't hard either way bro
Coz really, theres nothing to him..how can this whore stop me
my battleraps will kill him so no need for an autopsy...
weak
ima judging this guy is weak so ima snap him like a pencil
This is the court of law anything you say can and will be used against you
lol didn't eminem say something like this? anyways weak
this cocky cunt could get worn down and tossed in the dumps
watch hhim get ground to the grain like this involved coffee cups
almost
i'll murder him quick..close your eyes because you shouldnt watch
have you heard the term "measure to fit"..it applied to your wooden box
ok fine, +1, this was ok
I'll own this guy...forget human rights i wont make him my slave
coz his career wouldnt blast off if i knocked him straight into space
lol nah homie, played

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dude, your not a thug & in this deal I'm the dope one, so just stop it
cuz I promise, you can flip those 100 times and you'll still never profit.
meh
camarac is tasteless so please watch as I'm just bashin' his face in -
cam'd have some sexy thoughts in his head if he had arac to replace his...
this was ok wordplay, not hard though
your internet - you're scared n' shit and its obvious your shit is really soft
you couldn't dot COM cuz he knocked you out 2nd round of the playoffs.
nah weak
this is jon, you'd be wrong to think i'm the one you'll be shittin' on;
cuz the chances of you winnin's like the tournys chance of livin' on.
LOL nice +1
i'd callem a fuckhead but he'd never have luck in bed - he'll never be sexn'
unless i robobox his head and leave his whole fuckin' neck erected...
lol nah yo
your no celebraty; fuck trump cuz i'll be the first to leave you fired
i'd deflate this dick, pokin' holes in this prick'll leave'm no choice but retire
nahhh

ya this was closer then I expected, I don't think John tried his hardest either, Cam came pretty weak and the only shit I quoted from him was cuz I felt bad, that one line about the league was funny though John, other then that cam you needa work on your wordplay bro, like the spiderman line was the most complex shit you had in ya verse and wasnt too good, try and make all your lines have some complexity like that

i got it tied 1-1 but overall John came harder so v/ John
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Old 03-30-09, 04:34 PM   #10
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John wins

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