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09-14-04, 10:49 PM | #1 | ||||
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Must Read From Da Poet Fictional Peace
IP: 0825 899A
Confusing Questions With No Answers Bein Mentioned
Peace Bein Deceased Reason For Stress And Tension Keepin Our Children Guessin, Whats Right And Wrong We're Simply Carressin, The Sin That Consumes Us All Why Dont We Learn Our Lesson Before We Are All Gone? Why Do We Wait, Until It's Too Late And So Proned To Stall Just Siezing Peace, Relieving Grief, But Realisticly The Fact Is That, We Should Forget It, The Results Are Brief Quests For Less Tests Of Hate Would Be Great Just To Get Blessed Nevertheless We Stress, Our Community's Got People Puttin Holes In Innocent Chests... Government Swears Its Best... To Leave Em Alone... Dont Wanna Be Bothered... I'd Love To Follow A Thug Home Just To Meet His Mother And Father World Bein Cursed By Hatrid And Rage Bein Staged Caged In Racism Lacing Together Hate And Fate Descrimination And Hatrid Claiming Domination To Nations Evil Indications, Fake Friendships Ending In Tragic Relations Temptations To Procrastinate Will Decide Our Occupations Patience And Hardwork Results In Success Innovations Too Many Lives Bein Taken, Too Many Hearts Are Racin Tastin, Smellin, Hatrid Causin Body Chalk Tracins Thinkin We Too Mature To Learn From This Horrid Type Lifestyle I Dont Care How Old You Are, You're Still Just An Innocent Child Mildly Understanding Reasons For This Type Of Piece Honest Truth Spoken Of Real Yet Fictional Peace YO DROP SOME FEEDBACK ~PEACE~ |
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09-15-04, 09:39 AM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 0825 899A
yo son nice drop, keep at it cuzzin, and u MIGHT can do somethin with this "rapshit". j/k but foreal keep on writin. aight -1-
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09-15-04, 03:26 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
aight danx uppin damn uppin for more feedback
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09-15-04, 03:33 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
uppin for more feedback uppin
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09-15-04, 04:49 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: D26C 0847
that last line was the best line of the piece to me "truth and then fictional peace"
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09-15-04, 05:46 PM | #6 | ||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
^^^^^^^^^^ danx mayne but can u write a lil more about my open mic verse
yo uppin for more feedback |
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09-18-04, 02:43 PM | #7 | |||
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
i liked the topic. i liked ur vocab and ur sturucture. it was pretty deep man. it was real not like these other pieces cats put out about killin someone. this was pretty good. i give it a 8.5/10
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09-18-04, 03:00 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 28AD 5545
o aight fo sho danks uppin for more feedback mayne
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09-18-04, 03:45 PM | #9 | |||||||
Thank You, Come Again
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IP: 1C81 276B
nice dorp./....pretty good................bleh....the subject and direction you went in though has been told so many times so you get a 6/10 sorry...
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