word. thanks kemp. lets make it 12?

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233018
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233110
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233011

ill be here

12 is fine
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2818098
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=233011
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2818102

He's wack texcee, they already learned that lesson so they don’t need another then
N sperm doesn’t have to review the guy since it already covered him
Got rap documentaries jumping cliffs into toilets or they just disappear
While the directors are left saying they were following his career
N Ya girl has trouble understding my punchlines for text
Cuz my concepts are like a bag, always going over ya girls head
Nobody thinks you’re a threat at all when their facing you, dude
Only reason any decent head thinks your Dope is cuz their lines get Wasted on you
Ill leave this dude in a hospital bed for even thinking he's hard
After my fists leave him black the NAACP’ll freak when I give Image a-ward

ill fuk u up till theres nothing left, hells always burned on
ur like a computer bitch, one touch n u get turned on
stop with the attempts that shit is plain rude
man put it this way…. so it wont have to look at u
ur rhymes expired, ur not dope, n i wont hide this
the only trigger you ever pressed was on fucking time crisis
hell ur verse is degrading, i got ur dreams slowly fading
everyones got hell doing more bending over then military training
read this rap bitch, punch some sence into ur wackness
how the fuck are u posting, does hell have internet access?

He's wack texcee, they already learned that lesson so they don’t need another then
N sperm doesn’t have to review the guy since it already covered him
kinda weak
Got rap documentaries jumping cliffs into toilets or they just disappear
While the directors are left saying they were following his career
ehh

N Ya girl has trouble understding my punchlines for text
Cuz my concepts are like a bag, always going over ya girls head
weak
Nobody thinks you’re a threat at all when their facing you, dude
Only reason any decent head thinks your Dope is cuz their lines get Wasted on you
poorly worded
Ill leave this dude in a hospital bed for even thinking he's hard
After my fists leave him black the NAACP’ll freak when I give Image a-ward
decent closer


All in all, I honestly didn't like your verse. your flow was of by like one or two words in most lines and your punches were kinda weak and played man. you got the battle thing down but you should come more complex next time.


ill fuk u up till theres nothing left, hells always burned on
ur like a computer bitch, one touch n u get turned on
wak... its right up there with momma jokes during a battle
stop with the attempts that shit is plain rude
man put it this way…. so it wont have to look at u
good line, shouldv'e been written different but still a good line.
ur rhymes expired, ur not dope, n i wont hide this
the only trigger you ever pressed was on fucking time crisis
Ultra wak - I wish I never read this line
hell ur verse is degrading, i got ur dreams slowly fading
everyones got hell doing more bending over then military training
Wak
read this rap bitch, punch some sence into ur wackness
how the fuck are u posting, does hell have internet access?
ok line but really poorly worded.

Your style is decent but most of your lines just need to be reworded. you got ok concepts but you just need to know how to word em.' better.

You both def need to elevate but you did ok. Just need to work on your material and come harder next time. Keep it up and ya'll be str8

V/ Hell Yeah .... ... .. RTF in my battle with Oz.

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While the directors are left saying they were following his career
N Ya girl has trouble understding my punchlines for text
Cuz my concepts are like a bag, always going over ya girls head
Ill leave this dude in a hospital bed for even thinking he's hard
After my fists leave him black the NAACP’ll freak when I give Image a-ward

vs.

stop with the attempts that shit is plain rude
man put it this way…. so it wont have to look at u

this was a weak battle. hell had some pretty decent concepts, but nuttin too hard hittin. some that ish could've been alot better, with the better wordin. but not too bad against this fella. image, naw son. ur whole verse wasnt't good. the one concept i quoted was kind of funny, but nuttin great. work on coming with fresh material and better wording.

v/ hell yeah!

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He's wack texcee, they already learned that lesson so they don’t need another then
N sperm doesn’t have to review the guy since it already covered him
>>Really stretched. Also, why would sperm review him? Bad opener.

Got rap documentaries jumping cliffs into toilets or they just disappear
While the directors are left saying they were following his career
>>You had the concept but very poor delivery.


N Ya girl has trouble understding my punchlines for text
Cuz my concepts are like a bag, always going over ya girls head
>>Kind of watered down, but okay.

Nobody thinks you’re a threat at all when their facing you, dude
Only reason any decent head thinks your Dope is cuz their lines get Wasted on you
>>Delivery is atrocious. Not a very hard hit.

Ill leave this dude in a hospital bed for even thinking he's hard
After my fists leave him black the NAACP’ll freak when I give Image a-ward
>>Okay closer.



--Image--

ill fuk u up till theres nothing left, hells always burned on
ur like a computer bitch, one touch n u get turned on
>>Really bad opener.

stop with the attempts that shit is plain rude
man put it this way…. so it wont have to look at u
>>Concept is there but wording is off.

ur rhymes expired, ur not dope, n i wont hide this
the only trigger you ever pressed was on fucking time crisis
>>This was pretty horrible.

hell ur verse is degrading, i got ur dreams slowly fading
everyones got hell doing more bending over then military training
>>No...

read this rap bitch, punch some sence into ur wackness
how the fuck are u posting, does hell have internet access?
>>Bad nameplay.


Vote:

Hell Yeah




BARELY. Neither really had lines that I dug. The delivery needs to be brushed up by both parts but HY clinched it.

He's wack texcee, they already learned that lesson so they don’t need another then
N sperm doesn’t have to review the guy since it already covered him
Nobody thinks you’re a threat at all when their facing you, dude
Only reason any decent head thinks your Dope is cuz their lines get Wasted on you

vs

read this rap bitch, punch some sence into ur wackness
how the fuck are u posting, does hell have internet access?



if u really both verse u'll see dat dis was kind of one sided and hell yeah won dis easily...image ya last line was dope...u gotta come with some clever shit dog

v/hell yeah

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^^he's scared.lol

hell yeah:

He's wack texcee, they already learned that lesson so they don’t need another then
N sperm doesn’t have to review the guy since it already covered him
^^wack opener
Got rap documentaries jumping cliffs into toilets or they just disappear
While the directors are left saying they were following his career
^^no
N Ya girl has trouble understding my punchlines for text
Cuz my concepts are like a bag, always going over ya girls head
^^ehh
Nobody thinks you’re a threat at all when their facing you, dude
Only reason any decent head thinks your Dope is cuz their lines get Wasted on you
^^no
Ill leave this dude in a hospital bed for even thinking he's hard
After my fists leave him black the NAACP’ll freak when I give Image a-ward
^^decent attempt at wordplay


Image:

ill fuk u up till theres nothing left, hells always burned on
ur like a computer bitch, one touch n u get turned on
^^ok
stop with the attempts that shit is plain rude
man put it this way…. so it wont have to look at u
^^ok
ur rhymes expired, ur not dope, n i wont hide this
the only trigger you ever pressed was on fucking time crisis
^^decent
hell ur verse is degrading, i got ur dreams slowly fading
everyones got hell doing more bending over then military training
^^wack
read this rap bitch, punch some sence into ur wackness
how the fuck are u posting, does hell have internet access?
^^stupid


Both verses were pretty weak but image had 1 more quoatable than hell yeah so hes got my vote

V// Image

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1-4.

i coulda done better if i wasnt busy.

Hell Yeah...

Nobody thinks you’re a threat at all when their facing you, dude
Only reason any decent head thinks your Dope is cuz their lines get Wasted on you
Ill leave this dude in a hospital bed for even thinking he's hard
After my fists leave him black the NAACP’ll freak when I give Image a-ward

-vs-

Image...

ill fuk u up till theres nothing left, hells always burned on
ur like a computer bitch, one touch n u get turned on
stop with the attempts that shit is plain rude
man put it this way…. so it wont have to look at u


Hell Yeah's flow was garbo....Image read better
Hell Yeah's last bar didn't rhyme....but, wait...after readin his last line. It really didn't connect...or make that much sense to me. I mean it does but it don't?

V/ Image

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upping 2-4......

hell yeah definitely took this imo. he had the naacp line, although his wordplays and lines were stretched, he made it a point to diss the opponent. i felt like image was wastin his time here because he only had so much...he had about two decent lines in my opinion.

hell yeah made me laugh, and wins my vote for humor

v-hell yeah

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