RapVerse.com Community
 Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End RV Radio  

Go Back   RapVerse.com Community > Fresh From The Lab > Textual Releases > Freestyles
User Name
Password
FAQ Calendar Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

Reply
 
Thread Tools Search this Thread Display Modes
Old 02-23-06, 12:09 AM   #1
»»ÐižzY{RK}««
New to RV
 
Posts: 23
Joined: Feb 2006
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
20 bars of madness

IP: 841E 8049

im runnin wit muderest niggas dat'll take ya soul afta -takein ya life//
buh if i gotta take yur worthless life den im -takein it twice//
stupid ass niggas i'll leave u 2 -mold ina box//
nigga i -told u 2 stop//now u dead bitch n im standin dere-holdin da glock//
ima natural born killa so obviously ima -killa fashore//
i came out n strangeld da nurse wit my -imbilicol cord//
listen dawg i learn frum satan his self//yur a turtle i'll put ya face ina shell//
i'll kill all u mutha fukas ina battle n u say -u da greatest 2 rhyme//
i'll shoot chu inda mouf now u can -comunicate wit da nine//
fukin lil niggas talkin shyt i'll -bust a clip inya soon//
shoot u inda heart den-bust a piss onya wounds//
yo im puttin red dots on dis bitch buh it -aint his period//
my gun blow so loud even -satan hearin it//
wen i run up onu wit da piece i -aint hearin shyt//
ima fukin spycho im -bustin rounds ima shooter//
dun even battle meh u bettah off-shuttin down ya computer//
if u kno da way i am dun think ima -hesitate 2 shoot u//
i laugh death inda face dats probly -cuz im satans peuple//
ima shoot off da semi-auto makein it -rain shells//
im given led poison 2 ya head my clips is killin ya- brain cells//
__________________
DIZZY RK MUTHA FUKAS
NEW COMMER MUTHA FUKAS
READY 2 RIP YALL MUTHA FUKAS
IF U THINK U CAN RIP ME MUTHA FUKAS
I'LL PUT YA BRAIN INYA HANDS MAKE U HOLD DAT THOUGHT MUTHA FUKAS

Last edited by »»ÐižzY{RK}«« : 02-23-06 at 12:16 AM.
  Reply With Quote
Old 02-23-06, 12:16 AM   #2
»»ÐižzY{RK}««
New to RV
 
Posts: 23
Joined: Feb 2006
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 841E 8049

can i plz get sum feed bak
__________________
DIZZY RK MUTHA FUKAS
NEW COMMER MUTHA FUKAS
READY 2 RIP YALL MUTHA FUKAS
IF U THINK U CAN RIP ME MUTHA FUKAS
I'LL PUT YA BRAIN INYA HANDS MAKE U HOLD DAT THOUGHT MUTHA FUKAS
  Reply With Quote
Old 02-23-06, 01:29 AM   #3
Adam
 
Posts: 13,383
Joined: Jul 2004
From: Canada
Status: Offline
Text Record: 28-0
Audio Record: 1-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: A0C8 44A9

I saw the word "nigga" 3 times in the first 2 bars.

That is when I quit reading and came to the conclusion I was wasting my time.
  Reply With Quote
Old 02-23-06, 08:07 AM   #4
»»ÐižzY{RK}««
New to RV
 
Posts: 23
Joined: Feb 2006
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: A0F5 1A13

u must not hav read much den cuz u used dat word 3 times and i only used it twice in da beginin n 1nce inda middle ..............dumbass
__________________
DIZZY RK MUTHA FUKAS
NEW COMMER MUTHA FUKAS
READY 2 RIP YALL MUTHA FUKAS
IF U THINK U CAN RIP ME MUTHA FUKAS
I'LL PUT YA BRAIN INYA HANDS MAKE U HOLD DAT THOUGHT MUTHA FUKAS
  Reply With Quote
Old 02-23-06, 08:23 AM   #5
locknes
its WU muthafucka
 
locknes's Avatar
 
Posts: 1,118
Joined: Jan 2006
From: BOSTON
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 6F24 D17F

you need to elevate rhyme in ternaly and switch it up dont just do multies
your vocab was average but you need to learn about word use
that is the key but other than that this was straight i give it a 5/10
  Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools Search this Thread
Search this Thread:

Advanced Search
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump



All times are GMT -4. The time now is 10:56 PM.

Powered by vBulletin.
Copyright © 2000-2004 Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.