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Old 11-20-05, 08:28 PM   #1
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Just tryin something new here....

Acid attacks ablazed and abets alliances' acceptance
Buried babies blankly between birth band bents
Corrupted cadaster cores corporations cadaverous
Dull dark DNA dandily dumps dandruff da dangerous
Extravagent eagles eagerly earn easily earthbound
Fighting ferociously fast furious for freeloading found
Great generals gently generate generic generosity
Hate has hysteria holds hash has hypocrisy
Ignorant idiots isolate integrally in intelligent information
Just jackals jackknife jacklight jacuzzis jacitation
Killzones keep kind kings' kinships in kitchens
Liftin light lignums likely little lilys leave listen
Many men's moms mainly manually manipulate maps
No near nasty niggle necessary namely naps
Ostinatos obviously obviate obtuseness offstage
Praise pale purple pagoda's pains on palette pages
Quiet qabalistic Qaddafi quickly quadruple quacks
Right rigid rigging rigorously riles ringside racks
Seasonally serious sets settle in seven seas
Triangular traps trip tigers in treacherous trees
Utmost ushers utterly using up uzis ululatin
Valentines valiantly validate variables valuatin
Waitin wastefully walkin wholly whisperin wrappers
Xmas xrays Yellow yucky Zipper zebra zappers

links coming....
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Old 11-20-05, 08:29 PM   #2
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Old 11-20-05, 08:32 PM   #3
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Flow was nice and concept was aight the main thing i like was you kept your flow throughout your verse strtucre was alright and ill give your verse an Soild 7/12 Nice work keep it up fam
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Old 11-21-05, 06:47 PM   #4
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Thanks man Left feed on Jumper - Suicide Edition .....Uppin for more.....
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Old 11-23-05, 10:00 AM   #5
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Uppin...............
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Old 11-23-05, 10:03 AM   #6
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flow was ok, vocab (goes withoput saying) was very clever. Great idea nd it pulled off well. Rhyming was good and it was easy to read. I think it lost a bit of meaning at time but was still a well put together intelligent peice. Only advice is to put someting or two really funny or thought-provoking to keep interest
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Old 11-23-05, 10:12 AM   #7
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thanks man, yea now that i read it, it did go off topic a lil.
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Old 11-23-05, 10:15 AM   #8
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only a little but you got some madd skills there son, really hot.

You in a crew??? if you ever are looking for one let me know, i could av something right up your alley
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Old 11-23-05, 10:20 AM   #9
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......maybe man but not right now......
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Old 11-28-05, 04:53 PM   #10
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ive done something like this but it didnt make sence, i got the idea from Papoose the genius lol...good job though....wish the lines were longer so the flow was better
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Old 11-28-05, 05:32 PM   #11
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Yea i got the idea from Papoose too "Alphabetical Slaughter". Thanks for the feed....
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Old 11-28-05, 05:33 PM   #12
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....wish the lines were longer so the flow was better


Longer lines for better flow?..wtf was that.
Not everyone makes those gay ass topical shit with long ass lines,and ZERO flow like you and all them other fucking wannabe shakespear bitches do.
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Anyways..bonafide,your flow was good,ignore him.Longer lines=decrease in flow.
Longer lines do not help flow..so don't take mystic's comment as feed.
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Old 11-28-05, 05:40 PM   #13
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Aight well i'll keep that in mind man thanks for ur feed too.
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Old 11-29-05, 04:49 PM   #14
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Lol yo this was crazy....

strengths-Flow was nice and so was the vocab...crazy wording and thang man..

Dull dark DNA dandily dumps dandruff da dangerous
^^^^^^Nice

Triangular traps trip tigers in treacherous trees
^^^^^^Made sense in its own way..Flow was nice

I thought it coulda made more sense but i mean when ur trying to rhyme with different words with no particualr meaning its hard to stay on topic lol..

good read though B
make sure to check out my "can i get a...freestyle" when u can aiight
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Old 01-12-06, 03:58 PM   #15
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yo that was crazy that you can just hit something off like that with a alphabetical freestyle at that yo hit up my at 16 best piece i rote kinda uppin for feed my self but good drop cuzin
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