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08-23-04, 06:01 PM | #1 | |||||||
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"Seduction Of Pain" by DeadlyVision
IP: 5572 2B68
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/keyroguemusic.htm
Tittled: "Seduction Of Pain" Tell Me What Ya'll Think? Also Reply In The Message Board of my soundclick what i need to improve. And If u like it Vote on it Hot or Not left side on the song. Thnx for peepin it.
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08-23-04, 06:39 PM | #2 | |||||
The Ups and Downs of Life
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iight no doubt-- you just gotta pick up on ur delivery here try and keep your words a little more fluent, it sounds kinda like your readin- As far as your voice goes its workin, the beat needed a beat here i kinda felt like it was one giant intro until alicia dropped in with the beat, but you kept a tempo with your flow as far as bar length not swayin around too much- Quality wasn't bad I think the only thing I really didn't like was the lack of a bass line and the way if flipped from verse to chorus... it was a little choppy there... keep on doing ur thing though we need more heads doin audio so we can all elevate
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08-23-04, 06:49 PM | #3 | ||||
O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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IP: 19F7 7629
Did you take the song down? It's not on that link....
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08-23-04, 06:49 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: 5572 2B68
Naah i made it short because........i forgat to to cut the instrumental off at the end it kept on playin fo 2 more minutes..lol
But its up again.
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08-23-04, 06:54 PM | #5 | ||||
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This was a tough one to flow to, but I think you did ok. You rushed a few lines but I think you flowed well overall. You could have spoke up a little. Shit was a little short too. What happened to your accent? Sometimes you have it, sometimes you don't. Anyway, you could have faded out the ending just to make it sound a little more professional cause it just cut off.....Nice spit though....Keep Droppin
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08-23-04, 06:56 PM | #6 | |||||||
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Yea it was a rushed track...lol But is all good. this just a demo.....look out for the collab me & Dyce Of Pair N Smiley...
Is gonna be hot...is about drugs..lol
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08-23-04, 08:07 PM | #7 | ||||
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yeah its more like a spoken word piece, doesnt really fit with the beat. i know what you were trying to do. not sure how long youve been doing this dv, something that will help is just to know your rhyme forwards and backwards, so you can flip it on any track anyway. that will help your delivery. keep it up dog, keep spittin
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08-23-04, 09:20 PM | #8 | |||||||
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IP: 5572 2B68
Spoken Word........
Word......lol Up
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