|
|
|
|
| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
|
|
04-09-07, 09:54 PM
|
#1
|
|
|
New to RV
|
IP:
overall I could follow the story... But you need to work on not using such basic rhymes.. dead/head dam/cam route/out it just makes the verse too basic... It flows/sounds a lot better when u use multis ex. Just hop on the beats they nick name me "beat rider"/ Sonic boomin on lames like guile in "street fighter." that was just a quick example off the top of my head but its an example none the less.
Keep writing Stay up. |
|
|
|
04-09-07, 10:03 PM
|
#2
|
||
|
don't try.
|
IP:
Yea the rhyme scheme was basic..multi's would had made it flow alot better, overall this was a alrite piece, the story was decent..pretty interesting. But yea keep writin. elevate.
__________________
Fear |
||
|
|
 |
| Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
| Display Modes | |
|
|
Hybrid Mode
