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09-01-03, 07:51 AM | #1 | ||||||
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Torture Methods ft. mc81
IP: C1DA C961
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i'mma cereal killer ready to test limits of humanpain...lets commense... to kidnappin ya family shit i'm murderin ya moms ina sentance~/~ ropes ready to linch kids...now what ya offense isdefenseless... rippin you pussies like sororiety bitches with stalkers on ya campus's~/~ deploy death i'm drivin rusty nails in the deepest of ya vien...evil riens...shit syn and MC test the limits of morbidly pain~/~ insane nah we just wired,capable to eventually ripskin.... stop bichin gasoline ya family til they itchin with they chest singed in~/~ demented i'll choke a oxygen mask till lungs collapse and ya pass out.... fast mouths get crushed in i'm the devil child born in storms under a rain cloud~/~ snap backs....drive railroad stake threw you ...gotthis kid scared to talk...scared to walk ....fuck iding this victim you can't outline parts in chalk~/~ mc81 This world doesn't lack killing, nor blood spilling... But I'll be the last to cease murders in newspaper clippings Think i care when tears shed? Got A Betta Chanze of Givin Away Beer Kegs, I'll Trash Ya Specs Opposite Sex? I don't care as long as Snappin Necks, And Give use to Tecks Cuz Ya Pain I Thrive, I'll Gouge out Ya Eyes, Just So I Can't Hear Tears Dry, I'll put you In Flight Despite Ya Fright, I'll Fill Your Legs Up With Clips So Now Peeps Can Call You Thunder Thighs Despite No Hate, I'll Determine Ya Fate, Leave Your Mind Outta State Like Progressive Insurance I'm Killin You At a Great Rate, Imma Take more Than Estate I'll Amptutate Ya Limbs so Now You can Dodge Hits with Agility Ya Chances of Survivin Are Slimmer than an Anorexic Community |
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09-01-03, 08:08 AM | #2 | |||||
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feedback plz...
drop a link for feedback and i will give u some... btw this is my first ever poetical thingy... man that feels good to get all that outta my head...
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09-01-03, 08:29 AM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 4577 CD9A
upppin for this.....................................
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09-01-03, 08:32 AM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 19AF 50C1
yo both of you came strong
rippin you pussies like sororiety bitches with stalkers on ya campus's~/~ very strong punch mad props but it was also the strongest the others though good lacked the same umph mc81 This world doesn't lack killing, nor blood spilling... But I'll be the last to cease murders in newspaper clippings Think i care when tears shed? Got A Betta Chanze of Givin Away Beer Kegs, I'll Trash Ya Specs Opposite Sex? I don't care as long as Snappin Necks, And Give use to Tecks all that was hot top props Cuz Ya Pain I Thrive, I'll Gouge out Ya Eyes, Just So I Can't Hear Tears Dry, I'll put you In Flight Despite Ya Fright, I'll Fill Your Legs Up With Clips So Now Peeps Can Call You Thunder Thighs Despite No Hate, I'll Determine Ya Fate, Leave Your Mind Outta State none of it made that much sence Like Progressive Insurance I'm Killin You At a Great Rate, Imma Take more Than Estate I'll Amptutate Ya Limbs so Now You can Dodge Hits with Agility Ya Chances of Survivin Are Slimmer than an Anorexic Community real ill you cats sound good togeather just lacked a lil build on it and you will be mass ill |
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09-01-03, 08:34 AM | #5 | |||||
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thanx for the feedback fam...
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09-01-03, 08:38 AM | #6 | ||||||
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no prob peep me and noe brayna on neva b famus
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09-01-03, 02:13 PM | #7 | |||||
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the bars got really jammed up, iono that may have messed up the flow, it looks better on notepad.
can i get some more feedback?
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09-01-03, 03:01 PM | #8 | ||||||
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good topic and most of tha vocab was on point,flow was there,wordplay was patchy but in some cases good,all in one a nice collab,8/10.Good verse for a first collab.
Peace Dawg. Last edited by west : 09-01-03 at 03:05 PM. |
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09-01-03, 05:29 PM | #9 | |||||
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thanx for the feedback... UPPIN on this...
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09-01-03, 11:57 PM | #10 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
uppin on this thanks for the posts..............
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09-02-03, 02:30 AM | #11 | |||||
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Uppin for feedback on this piece...
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09-02-03, 04:43 PM | #12 | |||||||
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niceness......SynText had better vocabulary in this...u both had some tight flows....nice topic....agree with west on a majority....nice collab....esp. for first collab i've seen SynText in......mc81...u had some nice shit too...u had a better flow...and u was more on point than SynText....but Syn had u in vocabulary........
RATING 8.5/10 peace 4:20
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09-03-03, 01:03 AM | #13 | ||||||
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ayo thanks for the probs smoka lets get some more crits...................................
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09-03-03, 09:31 AM | #14 | |||||
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uppin man lets get some more feedback.
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09-03-03, 11:55 AM | #15 | ||||||
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uppin on this
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