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02-17-04, 05:06 AM
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Old School Sexy...
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Entrance To Regret
IP: CB28 E7E2
Chorus Drinking Booze And All That Fun, Never Leaves A Good Outcome.. Some Die, Others Get Pregnant, It's All The Faults Of Someone.. Unruly Nights, Ruined By Alcohol, And Their After Effects.. Both Were Drunk, So They Were Quick To Leave For Sex.. A Drunken Hook Up, Two People Caught Up In The Passion.. Unaware That Their Souls And Personalities Would Be Clashing.. But That Didn’t Matter Now, He Was Just There To Score.. And She Was Looking For A Good Time, Not To Become A Whore.. So Unaware That The Consequences Are Unbound By Each Other.. But That’s A Fight For Another Day, A Problem Yet To Discover.. By Her Or Her Love, This Meeting Was Destined To Finally Collide.. And As She Felt The Orgasm Of Her Lover, The Problem Buried Inside.. Chorus Drinking Booze And All That Fun, Never Leaves A Good Outcome.. Some Die, Others Get Pregnant, It's All The Faults Of Someone.. Morning They Exchanged Numbers, As They Promised To Call.. This Lead To Their Down Fall, Nothing Was In Common At All.. As The Phone Calls Started To Shrink, Her Belly Began To Grow.. Pregnant? She Didn’t Know, Cuz Her Problem Was Yet To Show.. And This Problem Didn’t Go, Tried To Find A Way To Diagnose It.. But All The Test Did Was Expose It, She Was In Some Deep Shit.. Pregnant? At Such A Young Age, But She Only Made One Mistake.. To Much Alcohol Intake, Now She Wishes This Night She Could Take.. And Never Speak Of Again, But Here It Is To Eternally Haunt Her.. So With Her Decision, Her Mind And Body Both Sat And Fought Her.. Chorus Drinking Booze And All That Fun, Never Leaves A Good Outcome.. Some Die, Others Get Pregnant, It's All The Faults Of Someone.. She Decided To Keep The Baby, But She Had To Inform The Father.. But She Has Not Talked To Him For Weeks, Why Should She Bother.. It Was His Problem, As Much As It Was Hers, So She Picked Up The Phone.. Sat There With The Dial Tone, And Started To Cry, She Felt So Alone.. But She Had To Get It Together, Took A Deep Breath And Began To Dial.. His First Reaction Was Denial, He Took Her Character And Began To Defile.. She Cried Through The Lies, And Pleaded Her Case Looking For Support.. But It Was Not Found Here, All He Could Tell Was To Take It And Abort.. Chorus Drinking Booze And All That Fun, Never Leaves A Good Outcome.. Some Die, Others Get Pregnant, It's All The Faults Of Someone.. Months Rolled On, He Finally Gave In And Moved In To Support Her.. Fighting Kept On, And She Only Found Solitude When He Ignored Her.. Until The Fateful Night Occurred, When He Could Not Take It Anymore.. He Had It Planned, Was Gonna Occur As Soon As He Walked In The Door.. So He Pounded Back The Two Four, And Cocked And Loaded The Gun.. He’d Rather Send Her To Heaven, Then End Up Having A Bastard Son.. So He Entered The House Holding The Gun, And Looking For The Victim.. Didn’t Know If He Had It In Him, Liquor Took His Conscience And Pinned Him.. He Found Her In The Kitchen, As He Entered Shots Were Fired From The Gun.. *The Man Dropped To The Floor* As The Women Screamed, “I’d Rather Him No Father Then Him Be Your Son” Chorus Drinking Booze And All That Fun, Never Leaves A Good Outcome.. Some Die, Others Get Pregnant, It's All The Faults Of Someone..
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Initial, Period  We're Coming For You
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02-17-04, 04:20 PM
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Old School Sexy...
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IP: CB28 E7E2
come on lets get some feed
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Acro Nim
Initial, Period We're Coming For You
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02-17-04, 04:34 PM
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IP: 9058 C066
This was a nice piece here man......I liked it, it made a good read i thought....Your structure in this was good overall nothing wrong with it......the flow in this was nice, it stayed on through the entire piece, it flowed pretty smoothly.....you had nice vocab like you usually do.....the chorus was alright.....overall a nice piece....keep at it.
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02-17-04, 11:12 PM
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Old School Sexy...
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IP: CB28 E7E2
upppin for more feed
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Acro Nim
Initial, Period We're Coming For You
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02-17-04, 11:18 PM
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IP: 181E 60F5
ok heres my though:
Very good read. Never was an effort it flowed well and was onpoint. My thoughts throught out were it was a played subject till the last verse and it really well came togther as quiet a good piece. You attack the subject well and on the end the victim seemed the victor in the sence which provioded a nice twist. Like drop like this where there is a bit of thought used . Good work . plz return the fev if u can http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115041 |
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02-18-04, 03:05 AM
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Old School Sexy...
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IP: CB28 E7E2
thanks for the feed, and lets up this
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02-18-04, 03:22 AM
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Anti Drug=Pre-marital Sex
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IP: 2F46 BF0E
i don't know what everyone else thinks but don't sleep on this piece. it was ill as fuck, nice twist at the end, each verse was extremely well written. i don't really have anything else to say accept that I'm nominating this piece....good work Speek.
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02-19-04, 01:49 PM
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IP: B4E1 2E2C
thiz was hot good shyt good vocabs n nice flow 1 be safe
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