15 Lin Min

25 Lin Max

Check In: Oct. 3rd

Due Date:Oct. 6th

Topic: The Most Beautiful Thing..

Good Luck.

oh crap.
well, I'm in.
this should be interesting, because, you know, I'm facing uber poetry man up in here. Last tourney you made anal sex look like waltzing with God, you crazy asshole!
now I need to write against you.
I will enjoy this, I hope you do too.
good luck
= )

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Life isn't a bitch...
she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

On another point. I don't want to clog up this thread. Then again, it is our thread.

The anal sex thing. Too many people got the wrong idea when they read that. They didn't seem to get it. It was an integral part of what was being explained. Put in relatively 'normal' thought/situation. I guess it roughly epitomised what was being depicted...it wasn't just about titilation and what not. Though that was a substantial factor to add to the effect, like....

Er, yeah, just thought i'd clear that up. Though i'm sure no one cares.

Waiting to see some wonderful displays of skill.......................
Best of luck to both of you amazing lyricists.............................
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Don't judge it till you've tried it. Having anal sex while waltzing with God happens to feel great.

You're right, varentao, nobody does care. Except me of course cause I'm special.

And finally, if you need help on the subject "The Most Beautiful Thing.." then you just have to look no further then me of course. 'Cause I'm just that damn good.

And uh... yeah... I'm waiting too.

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

theres no use in being civil to the beautiful things
when good triumphs over evil on a vampire's wings
and no time for alliance with heavenly blessings
because society is reliant on happiness they bring
eyelids are spread wide drinking in all the light
the shorebound sit aside for power lies in flight
above clouds, below ground places where cold's found
frictional heat is profound moaning without a sound
we are all alone together, twin fetuses grow apart
1000 lbs of feathers will crush the strongest heart
and yet in this simplicity it is easier for me to breath
single in my duplicity, harder for Layman to conceive
impossibilities reach high, from the ant hills there
it's difficult to deny, when I must grin and bear
the beauty that confronts, all underneath the sun
acrimonious and blunt, all I want is to be one
with it, and all it is, and everything that I wanted
metaphoric bliss, only the heart and mind responded
start the binding grips, before it leaves your lips
Jack Frost begins to nip, numbed by his Acid Trips
even winter is affected by the harmonious night
black stallions defected, sick of all and every slight
appalled in every light, to tell their foreign tale
you can have my sight, but my soul is not for sale

Her Beauty Passed Me By, And I Forgot To Even Try



werd up, varenizzle!
(oh God I'm tired)

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Life isn't a bitch...
she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

The Most Beautiful Thing: Complex Beauty


Watching summer caught by winds
Grey clouds shroud mysterious ways
Biting cold strangles to epic surrender
Tearful rain breaks stormy screams

Melodic murmurs boil senses red
Yellow crimes haze battle weary minds
Poverty grips green grind’s growing circle
Riveting blues play nights away

Old wise tramp kisses cool cracked concrete
Devouring butter fried bread in sweet misery
Distant city lights becomes temporal stars
Desperation stirs stimulated death to reality

Moonlit sky drives dense rhythmic air
Floating memories help mould unholy wisdom
Frozen eyes thawed by echoing varied cries
Abstract beauty form my visions of heaven


Heh. Both on sailing near the edge, eh?


Big up, understamentinizz...*rolls eyes*...

nice stuff guys. madd complexity and dept felt in both peices. im kinda thrown back on how to vote cause ya topic is unraveled in itself, but 2 break stuff down. V ya veres were justice foe the topic. i honestly sat back and was able to visuliaze the scenery aka the complex beauty in ya wordplay. the last bar finished like icein on the cake, Great Stuff. now U ya verse was deeper then most bottomless pits. just complexs point of view thats just kept going. i really felt lost threw the peice. like ya ant hill meta flew way over my head. Yet, i kinda thought that was ya intent do to becuase of the topic, but i dunno. so like i stated before kinda hard to chose a staright answer from complex peices, but only
the judges can make the decisions here...
peAce 2 b0th of ya's

is she suppose to be voting lol or do i just not get who she is.....
gege may i vote ( IF THIS DOESNT COUNT -O-WELL- LOL)



UNDERSTATEMENT

theres no use in being civil to the beautiful things
when good triumphs over evil on a vampire's wings
^^
i thought the usage of vampires wings really gave this an eary essense as if your taking the most beautiful thing and making it evil and good triumphing over evil is what we all hope for but rarely recive

and no time for alliance with heavenly blessings
because society is reliant on happiness they bring
you kno that i so true and i belive thats why most people
become DEPRESSEd is because they always hope for it all and never recive nearly as much happiness as they wold have hoped to we as people rely to much on society to alter our feelings
eyelids are spread wide drinking in all the light
the shorebound sit aside for power lies in flight
your simple ryhme scheme come sin handy in this peice it makes it easy for the reader to get on the poetic vibe and follow through without having to stumble trip and spill saliva over big words that you arnt really sure if they ryhme or not ( not that all poetry ryhmes lol Look at myne)
above clouds, below ground places where cold's found
frictional heat is profound moaning without a sound
for some reason this was SUPPOSE to paint a picture but it didnt for me i was to busy trying to visualize it that i got lost in its context
we are all alone together, twin fetuses grow apart
1000 lbs of feathers will crush the strongest heart
WOW that was great the comparison with feathers KNOWING that 1000lbs would be SO FREAKIN many feathers wow I LOVED THAT that right there was so exellent the visual of it ....great
and yet in this simplicity it is easier for me to breath
single in my duplicity, harder for Layman to conceive
i belive that this part may throw some readers off not knowing the layman terms and teh SINGLE in DUPLICITY was a great usuage of terms there ...im so amazed
impossibilities reach high, from the ant hills there
it's difficult to deny, when I must grin and bear
BEAR in that from as the animal is great because of your refernce to ANTs as well you could have used BARE and had the same emaning but not the same UNIQUNESS great again
the beauty that confronts, all underneath the sun
acrimonious and blunt, all I want is to be one
had to use the dictionary on that word but after finding the meaning i was shocked at your greatness once again that word added just enough complexity to your poem to make it a little edgy
with it, and all it is, and everything that I wanted
metaphoric bliss, only the heart and mind responded
THAT truly is the most beautiful thing
start the binding grips, before it leaves your lips
Jack Frost begins to nip, numbed by his Acid Trips
i belive that when you put in acid trips it took us off the LOVEY dovery vibe and placed us off track a little bit perhaps too much of the wrong type of vibe
even winter is affected by the harmonious night
black stallions defected, sick of all and every slight
black stallions great imagry and i belive horses are truly beautiful so that related to me and made me appreciate this even more
appalled in every light, to tell their foreign tale
you can have my sight, but my soul is not for sale
and it shouldnt be...for a soul beutiful enough to write a poem like this is surly one that will never go up for sale no matter the price offered

Her Beauty Passed Me By, And I Forgot To Even Try

forgot to try seemed a bit off to me if your entrapped in her beauty yes it wold fit...but if your only at the point where you'r stuck but could still get away ( which is what i got ) then perhpas you would try...personal op of course



this was a great peice a beautiful ( but not easy ) topic and you wrote so damn well

varentago:
The Most Beautiful Thing: Complex Beauty
you giving us your extension of teh topic *complexx beauty* sets teh stage and puts us right on track without even having to read any further i appreciate that


Watching summer caught by winds
Grey clouds shroud mysterious ways
Biting cold strangles to epic surrender
Tearful rain breaks stormy screams
IT is rainging here in pendleton (where i am) and this made me shiver i looked out the wondow and what did i see Grey clouds and thunder n lightning I AM REALLY in the MOOD for this peice and that is so very true
Melodic murmurs boil senses red
Yellow crimes haze battle weary minds
Poverty grips green grind’s growing circle
Riveting blues play nights away
HAZE eh? greens , reds, greys, blues, your following of the color cheme is truly poetic in that we KNOW theses colors WE have ALL seen them we can there for relate to your poem in the snes that YES I HAVE SEEN THAT I KNOW WHAT IT LOOKS LIKE feel me? truly great V
Old wise tramp kisses cool cracked concrete
Devouring butter fried bread in sweet misery
Distant city lights becomes temporal stars
Desperation stirs stimulated death to reality
the D starting makes you prouncouete the first word of each sentence and say the formation of D there for giving this stanza a WOW powerful impact
Moonlit sky drives dense rhythmic air
Floating memories help mould unholy wisdom
Frozen eyes thawed by echoing varied cries
Abstract beauty form my visions of heaven
heaven to me is not a beautiful thing i belive it is a thing of betrayel and false belief....and i wish someday that it will change for me..... the echoing cries part i read right as thunder hit and it made me once again shudder you are such a great poet and i appreciate you and your work to the fullest extent of my poetic being


ON the topic of voting
it is truly hard for me and it saddnes me to think i have to choose then again I PRIDE MY SEL FIn being able to read these great poems my honest opinion in the giving the topic understatement rose above and conqured the topic to a point wher ei have not seen better

varentago you are in deed one of ym favorites poets this is true but in this battle i belive unda won

*hope i could aid in the terror of voting gege*

Heh. Both on sailing near the edge, eh?

"Heaven is not the most beautiful thing.."..exactly, one of the points of the piece. But heaven was a common link. Hence the 'my heaven'. Thanks for digging, hazy. Complex Beauty is the title. A quick one.

Appreciate the honesty. (though its Varentao, no g!).

^lol @varentago

Yes, Hazy..I will count your vote, since it was so in depth and i haven't seen Shiz around in a while..Im gonna take the judges i can get..while i still got em...But if youre gonna vote on this one, how about Preacher vs. Content?

1-0 in Unda's favor.

I'll vote on this in a few..

sorry to freepost on this but hazy will probaly
judge whats easier to read...which is my opponents..
my words come from my fuckin heart and arent just
fancied in a way to make it sound good..its all for a
reason and makes perfect sense.....good judges
would be the following for the remainder of this..

Gege..hazy didnt even spell you name right....

Camarac
Shiznit
Deacon

i'd be glad to judge.....but this has been an ultra strange tourney....people leaving...not agreeing.haha its a mess....welll if so ill post my words tomorrow regaurdless if it counts..

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I liked both pieces, however due to my lack of a friendship with poetic overlord GeGe i shan't vote or even allow my opinion to be released so that i dont sway any judges but good job to both...FREEDOM OF SPEACH FUCKAHS!!! 1luv.