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05-14-06, 05:11 PM | #1 | |||
Dont Fuck With Me! EZ....
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just feel me for a sec.....
IP: AE91 B6D3
yo check it man,
am a mid age spic that love to beef like i cant stand chick'ens but there is more to my life then ,money girls and coke flipp'in there a struggle deep in my heart that got my soul missing cuz every day i earn respect i lose a check i could of made living but NO, i wanted something i cant have, found something i cant own plus my resent communication u hear had noting to do with a phone just a couple of shots from the block i sleep and daugther plays-in why the fuck the street a place for war, an a safe home is called the days-in these are the times where old kids needs to grow up and show us how to make a living, insted they out there with gang sign they throw up wont be satifyed till they in a cuff'in or brain a couch pottao everyday they wanna be killahs but when the sound go off there afaird thou? i never thought life could be like this never thought the nite would see lights...like this a bounch of haters and fags who wanna be like sis so for food i feed him a right-fist, i see u dont like this u like what u hear.. yea.. plus it be me who write this like shaq at the 3 if u aim i can see u might miss un-finished!!! drop feed back plez!!
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NOT TO BE FUCKED WITH!!!! |
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05-15-06, 08:16 AM | #2 | |||||
Black Poet
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IP: 860D ECBB
Sup R this was a decent droped !! had good flow ! nice vocab could have been
up but it was alright,.. and the topical was cool but u could have come a little more creative then that but all round decent drop. Stay up 1~ |
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05-15-06, 09:05 AM | #3 | |||
New to RV
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IP: A1F4 7B78
Nah I Dissagree With You Crit, I Didnt Like This Peice. No Hate Rex But It Jus Was'nt Complex Enuff For My Liken. Try Picking A Solid Subject, Something You Could Really Go To Work On Nah Mean, This Type Of Issh Is Played As Hell.
Try Uppin Ya Vocab A Lil, Pick A Subject You Can Drop Good Emotion And Imagery On. No Hate..Jus An Hounest Opinion Rex.. Peace Out 1 |
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05-15-06, 12:03 PM | #4 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 1FAE 749F
I like it, doesn't stand out however but still a nice drop
7.9/10 |
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