Donate rhymes and associate with minds in the rap zone
Write mellow script that bring about fellowship and scrap domes
Leaving a yellow strip on microphone that even Ajax won’t remove
Write clean lines with a tight keen mind sometimes I couldn’t
Grow and wouldn’t flow like this, it’s a gift there shouldn’t
Be any crime parts in fine arts so when my nine sparks
Violence stir and then silence occur my pistol grips has divine marks
In the form of finger prints linger and spent time trying
To wipe them off, legal fun quotes shouldn’t equal dying
In gun smoke like a trooper in starched pants will march and advance
On targets in markets of symphony, pockets are empty a chance
To get paid, invincible and cool like a principal in school try
Educate cats and devastate with stats dedicate my hats to the sky
Fly in classrooms as my task blooms urging students to take
Complex looks at textbooks some vexed and shook on the title
Need fast logic as students are a class of objects that are vital
And subject to failure the public will jail ya for that suicidal
Is making the list this year also can fall low to criticism societal
Battle of words which rattle herds of teachers and it can feature
Salary cuts some have allergy but still included like preachers

It's good to see that some newbs have talent, this was nice started slowly
but it ended well. Nice use of vocab but it can be up-ed ! same with complexity.

U seem to say to much when u dont, really have to if u know what I mean..

I liked this bar,..
Be any crime parts in fine arts so when my nine sparks
Violence stir and then silence occur my pistol grips has divine marks
^^dope^^

need to step your game up with your topicals but I'm sure u will get there
shortly, keep writing and stay active is the only advice I will give you & read
other Open mics and topical battles.

tornado and xplict are some good nu-bs and if they keep it up they'll go far in the game.

this was good. better then that last drop. but u can do pretty good storys, here u just spittin. try tellin us a lil bit bout ur life. problems loves. etc. like i sometimes do.. it may catch the readers attention. try checkin out my piece " a body with no soul" ull see wut i mean

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