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04-05-07, 10:19 PM | #1 | ||||
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"Wobble Wobble" a fun lil club track!
IP: 3011 7E9C
yea somethin i did for the party scene....im tell you this one will stick in your head long after you hear it.....haha
WOBBLE WOBBLE - http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=5199088 links - http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=241113 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=241039 ill return all feed.....
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04-05-07, 10:33 PM | #2 | |||||
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IP: 2372 BC06
are you serious man is this all the shit you do? All you do is these club tracks man for everything. ok beats hot but this all you ever do. Your flow is good and I like ya voice but your lyrics just wack man. i aint feelin them to basic and you sound to black man the way you talkin. overall man i'd suggest flip ya style for once man. other than that its pretty coo.
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04-05-07, 10:52 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 3011 7E9C
haha....@ all i do is club tracks....seeing how what i put online is a lil less then a 3rd of what i do.....oh well aside from the unwarrented judgement....im glad you liked it...and its made to make you dance...so the lyrics arent the important part and some are sorta clever....but sound to black...what is that implying?
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything so i took my old man's advice three sad semesters it was only fifteen grand spent in bed i thought about the army i dropped out and joined a band instead |
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04-05-07, 11:16 PM | #4 | |||||||
I'm Talented.Period.
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IP: F200 2F84
u already know wut I think bro
solid track...with a borrowed theme otherwise...good 1 1 |
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04-05-07, 11:37 PM | #5 | ||||
Fuck Parents
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IP: 6D21 AB67
you sound too black? wtf, lol ummm no offense or anything but if i were jay, i'd rather not sound white. wait, jay are you white or black? lol well anything solid track here, gots me rockin a lil bit but seems like somethins missin on the hook ta have me actually dancin to this in the club
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04-05-07, 11:49 PM | #6 | |||||||
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comng from someone who sucks im sure he isnt worried
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04-06-07, 12:00 AM | #7 | |||
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Lol. Actually, this is far from my style - And I usually don't like music like this. But I actually liked this. You had some OK meta's and some whack meta's in the lyrics. It's not really a song, it's more like a "Club Track" type, lol. Like Sir Vol said. The flow is straight, its not choppy or anything. Quality sounds pretty tight to me. But prolly my favorite thing is the beat, it's hot as fuck. Keep it up bro.
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04-06-07, 12:59 AM | #8 | ||||
~Spitten Fire~
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LOL at Tony sayin Vol sucks.......haha......statin the obvious........but yo man jay track is strate man belongs in the club it's hype man......feelin ya delivery.....overall nice drop fam......
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04-06-07, 05:19 AM | #9 | ||||||||
Pushin it....
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IP: B3FF 83C3
it was ok, but to generic for my taste bro....
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04-07-07, 05:10 AM | #10 | |||||||
The Most Feared Gang!
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IP: 3D8F 41DF
Listenin'..
Beat is hot.. You sound a lil like Ike... Verse - it's decent...you held down the verse better than ure hook...you tried to south it up..and it didn't fit atall...flow was basic but didn/t fall.. Hook - You tried..adlibs were right..but it felt too controlled...You shuda added sum breaths, some more adlibs in/bw and changed the mixing...it was just layered extra. The Hook needs to b 100 percent on a club track..it was like 45 here..so it ruined the rest of it.. But this wasn't bad nah mean...it was a decent attempt at gettin clubs jumpin and you had the right delivery/energy in the verses...6/10 The bridge was rlly messed up...the volumes were not right...but word holla
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04-07-07, 04:28 PM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: F618 C57D
Yo,
Just peeped the track... I can't help but think the conecpt is borrowed... No biggie though. as far as your flow it sounded pretty good. I also agree that you could of did a bit more on the adlibs The chorus was aight.... It takes either easy repetitive words or perfect words to have a hot club track in my opinion... Overall though ya did ur thing man. I would say 7/10. Keep bangin the tracks homey. |
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04-07-07, 06:48 PM | #12 | |||||||
ILL GRAMMATIX... any other questions?
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IP: AF61 4A0B
feeling the energy on this joint... like how you broke it down with the panning at the end... "stop... shake.... drop... shake..." or however that part went...lol... you coulda made the hook flow better though... don't change the words... just make the lines kinda flow into each other better.... i'll holla at you later and tell you what i mean on the phone and shyt.... gotta talk about that show shyt too...werd
good lil jump off.. beat is crack
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