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Old 04-05-07, 12:26 PM   #1
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Old 04-05-07, 04:24 PM   #2
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Up. I will return the favor. Just leave links.
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Old 04-05-07, 05:47 PM   #3
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this beats really hot im feelin it. Your quality is really wack man. not horribly wack but your vocals seem to loud. Your flow is pretty good too and your dubs are on lock. lyrics are pretty good. Your delivery is weak, try and get a little more emotional wit it. but def turn your vocals down man. Your hook is pretty catchy im feelin it. overall not bad man seem like you sound like concious from rb, you have a very similar style you just deliver ya shit different. not bad though I'd like to hear you when you impove more man nice shit.
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Old 04-05-07, 08:40 PM   #4
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love this beat wow, where did you get it from, anyway lyrics are pretty cool, hook is not really great to be honest, maybe if you adlib it, pretty sick man, flow is good too, for a first track recorded its pretty dope im impressed, 7/10 we should collab once, I usually do tracks like that, get fuck up with me was a new attempt lol, anyway peace bro
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Old 04-05-07, 10:09 PM   #5
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ight the beat is a lil simple to me...i unno, you need to bury the vocals more in the track....the effect on the hook isnt good at all....but otherwise its fine....like they said throw a lil more emotion into it and your golden....some little things to fix up but you'll get hang of it
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Old 04-05-07, 10:21 PM   #6
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rtf on wobble wobble...........................
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Old 04-05-07, 11:14 PM   #7
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u got potential...but ur flow is amateurish...can tell ur a newbie...rap like ur got big cojones!

nah mean!

hook is lackluster...but decent

vocal quality could be better...mixed better

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Old 04-05-07, 11:42 PM   #8
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quality actually isnt what's bringin this down but just that the vocals are too loud. like q said, flow is very simple but atleast you stay on point unlike ppl who try to make their rhyme scheme complicated and can't even stay on beat lol n werd again to q, spit like your nas or some shit, cockiness is a good thing. beat's not my style, too simple for me. hook just needs better mixing n some adlibs. the hook's actually a bit too quiet. switch the volumes of the hook and verses lol but damn, if this were my 1st track i'd prob be twice as good now cuz shit, fact is half the audio heads online dont even sound this good
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Old 04-05-07, 11:53 PM   #9
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Thanks everyone for the feed. And yeah, I always used to spit on beats but never had shit to record it with. As far as the quality, it's not even my equitment. And I don't work on the vocals or anything. This is all my buddy's shit. I'm still workin on buyin stuff for my own. I'll definatly try to improve. Thanks alot again. I'll be returning the favor shortly.
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Old 04-07-07, 12:34 AM   #11
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Ha. Yeah, I guess you can say that.
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Old 04-08-07, 07:56 PM   #12
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I'll up this one more time.
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