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06-04-06, 05:54 PM | #1 | |||||||
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Time Stops (experimental piece)
IP: 4381 3163
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2760980
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2760990 The Worlds Rotation And Time Stops And It Goes Dark Except For Me And Only For Me To Be Heard The grains of sand observe the pains of man with indifference- while free falling, recalling shameless plans of increments- An instant is defined by a second that’s combined with a lesson- Life is a sum of the seconds, but some live a lifetime in a second- Time is perspective, a seductive ocean, conductive lotion- Tasteless, invites you to waste it, but some obstruct the motion- An instructive potion of enlightenment, that’s heightened when- innocence nixes ignorance inside divine and righteous men- A dollar sign is time that’s spent in hopes of securin’ tomorrow- hope is blurrin’ the sorrow that life is a tour and it’s borrowed- from here with no start to finish who sees no heart or vision- The mother stands taller and sleeps in those darker prisms- Why honor wisdom? Well it passes the tears of time- The past affects the mind, through déjÃ- vu, it’s passed a second time- I have to press rewind, far away enough, the track makes a u-turn- But few learn from the relationship the past drapes the future- Time Is Of The Essence... My Time Interval Slots Are Often Spent In Spiritual Block- So I Pass The Time By Staring At The Hands On A Digital Clock- Flooded With Cynical Thoughts, I Release The First Notion- And Freeze The Time By Suspending The Earth’s Motion- A Surge Potent Enough To Tear The Surfaces Texture In A Sense- Like Weight Is Measured In Pounds, Time Is Measured In Events- Text Words Can’t Impress, So I’ll Help You Invision This Certainty- An Old Timer Has A Short Life, While A Teen Live An Eternity- Every Ticks An Emergency, With Out It, You’re In An Ocean Of Mess- Cause Times The Hitchhiker That Leads You On The Roads Of Success- It Opens The Next Chapters And Captures The Bland Design- That We Can Live Long And Leave Our Footprints On The Sands Of Time- Things That Can Distract The Mind And Lead It Away From The Truth In Lesson- Might Lose Affection For Patience, Yet Perseverance Is A Useful Weapon- Draw It, It’ll Boost Progression And It Will Erase The Proceedings- It’s Time To Throw Away My Clocks And Put Faith Back Into My Feelings- Earth’s Rotation Resumes And Time Comes Back To Play Its Role As Life… For I Was Heard And Need To Say No More… Last edited by SkaNdaLuz : 06-04-06 at 05:58 PM. Reason: misspelling |
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06-06-06, 10:26 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: ADC2 2DA3
Is anyone even gonna LOOK at this? Damn, don't sleep on this.
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06-08-06, 01:27 AM | #3 | |||||
A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: 2029 97B3
this is dope and creative as fuck man,the emothion was average and the imagery in the piece was way above average i mean sexyness son lol, the vocab was great also, i loved the approach on the structure it was good,the concept was unique also good read man.
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06-13-06, 12:30 PM | #4 | ||||
pain is weakness leaving the body
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i agree w/ valor for the most part, but damn, check ur font playa... great imagery, pretty good vocab too, finally someone that can use words in the right context... i really liked this piece playa, keep writin...
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06-21-06, 01:06 AM | #5 | |||||
Internet is so beef...
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IP: F78F 624D
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07-26-06, 06:26 PM | #6 | ||||||||
Zar Bi-Shup
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IP: 4312 793E
Lmao
*owned*
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07-26-06, 10:14 PM | #7 | ||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 22D6 9E30
wowwwwwww.......................................co me on now
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