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05-24-03, 11:58 PM
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Reflection of Fate
IP: 0B5C E56C
Jose, 51 Years of age. After his wife dieing 2 years earlier, this is the anniversary of her death. He decides to take a stroll in the woods behind his house, to do some thinking. Out of no where, something he never noticed in the time he’s lived there, there is a clearly cut out path, so he walks down it, and stumbles upon a lake. He goes down to get a drink of water, when in the reflection he sees 2 things other than his own face, and body.
--Before the Encounter-- I need to walk, catch my breath, and make my heart rest Is this my heart’s test? 2 years ago my life collapsed My wife’s relapse detached my mind and spirit At night I hear it, her voice is a term of endearment “Oh wait! What’s that !? A narrow path leading in? I never saw this around here.” So I decided to stream it Walking down this narrow path, listening to the birds chirping Animals running around, watching beetles as they were lurking “Where did this lake come from,” I thought to myself quietly I felt something upon my face; I looked down to see what it might be --He Sees the Reflection-- A mosquito caressed my skin and facial hairs I pushed it off ever so gently, as it gave me fainted glare Another bug came to me, painted my hairs with his body I whacked this one, looked at my reflection, revealing 2 bodies --He’s Clueless until He Looks-- I gazed closely at the figures, the rings in the water disappeared They started to clear up, I had a feeling that she was here I noticed a man next to her. “How can I help you, madam? I hope I didn’t intrude on your quest.” I wanted to snap at ‘em Coming up on an old man as such as my age? “Jose,” a soft voice said, again it was calling my name “Jose I’ve missed you, please come with me.” “Rosa? Is that you?” I was scared...”Yes it’s me.” The reflection cleared up, I couldn’t think of a rational thesis But standing there with my late wife, a man called Jesus --He Thinks to His Self- Have I missed her that much that she stands right before me? Or am I imagining my wife’s return, wishing she’d still adore me. I loved her, she was my only love, and had no fears I can’t believe a great marriage was forced to end at 11 years --The Contact-- I looked back up at the reflection, and amended her stance I went to speak “I...” then she extended her hands “Come with us,” she said, I was still at the same stiff poise “It’s your choice,” she said, “Be strong and follow my voice” I extended my hand to her, than the leaves diminished Animals went silent; maybe the songs of birds were finished I held her hands tightly; a blinding light covered the area Mind’s crazy now, “Honey, I’m in a state of hysteria! What’s going on ?!” I shouted and screamed I felt comfortable, she said “I told you never to doubt me.” ... Jose died that night, in his sleep. People say he ‘went’ happy, others say he was depressed. We will never know… daMn . . . |
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05-25-03, 12:20 AM
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IP: 399E F0FD
This ish was DOPE!!!! Storyline amazing...
holy shit...ahh...DOPE DOPE DOPE...dont know what to quote ILLNESS!!! RB LEGENDS NOT A QUESTION....Weezy is good... 
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Kevin. Alex. Patrick. John. |
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05-25-03, 12:59 AM
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IP: 5063 2F37
oh my fucking god............................................... .................am speechless
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05-25-03, 01:13 AM
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IP: 395F 0829
holy shit tis was above all tha best shit i have ever read and tis has to be placed in tha rb legends but enough of tat tis deserves a 10/10 a rare entity tat tis is im shocked and amazed weezy u got tha talent of a king and tis just proved it im beyond werds to say anything negative of it tis was tha best piece i have ever read
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67-30-46 combined overall on rb keep lethal in thy beatin heart/ let thy tactix slip life falls apart/ vote on |
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05-25-03, 01:22 AM
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IP: 5063 2F37
okay a finally found some words
DDDDDAMN and its a keeper |
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05-25-03, 02:00 AM
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IP: FF98 53B8
This cat has Born talent man..............I'm loving this cat's drops.........Storyline was Amazing........Like i said before........Ur style is tight..........Da content was Blazing..........This drop would be a Nice audio
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05-25-03, 09:07 PM
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IP: 0B5C E56C
Damn . . . I'm glad all of you like it.
I'm speechless as well for all these comments, and yes I'm in the Topical League, so champs, watch out . . . Thanks and Uppin' for more if possible . . . |
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05-25-03, 11:46 PM
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IP: 0B5C E56C
Can I get some more? I will return favors y'know!
*goes crazy* |
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05-26-03, 12:15 AM
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Light Weight
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IP: 640C 3FBD
This was...amazing, man. Absolutely amazing. I normally don't read a whole lot of the open mics but I'm glad I clicked this one. I liked how you described everything so well. Telling how the water had ripples in it an all that.
The concept was really good. I've never read anything like that before. You definately have a very good imagination. By the way, you a Christian? |
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05-26-03, 01:42 AM
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IP: 0B5C E56C
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Btw, why you ask about my religion? |
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05-26-03, 02:21 AM
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Light Weight
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IP: 640C 3FBD
I saw the reference to Jesus in your post and I was saved about 8 months ago. I dunno, I just think it's cool coming across other Christians
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05-26-03, 04:14 AM
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IP: 4982 3651
that shit was imaculate kid,i was feelin it directly...good storyline..good beggining..good ending..and u gotta crazy style..on a scale of 1 to 10 u gotta 20..be lookin for more shit.
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05-26-03, 04:28 AM
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IP: EE66 657E
Hmm ILL I cant think of much else then that word...Or maybe Extravagent, or Emotional...Wheezykeep my updated on your other posts You got potential but its already there lol
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05-26-03, 07:38 AM
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IP: 1501 77A0
haha liked the concept.......that was ill...that vocab used on the first verse was maddness.....i liked it how like in the last verse u mentioned the birds n shit....that was good cuse like u didnt make it so it was like a tottally diffrent scene.........that shit was dopeness to the power infinity....................keep postin..........11/10
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05-26-03, 11:28 AM
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IP: 0B5C E56C
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DiverseSyndicate - Thanks for reading, and that score is making me tear, lol. Thanks alot TriX - Dawg, thanks alot man. 11/10, nice. Glad you liked it. If you can one day, hit me up on AIM. WeeZthaTruth. Thanks triLL - Thanks man. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Up for more? |
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