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Alright here is some of my ex-bf's ryhmes that he wrote for me. I think that he is good and he deserves to be recgonized. So check it out and tell me what ya'll think:

1.)
I've been thinkin about you again
Thought of you on my mind neva end
It's just the many times we spent
When I hear that laugh and see that smile
I'm happy knowin that I put that there
Findin a love like ours is so rare
Even a thousand years from now I'll be there

2.)

Every step I take and every breath I take
Think of you before I sleep and wake
Visions of you haunt my memories
Time will only show we are ment to be
Wit you by my side there is nothin I can't do
I'll do almost anything you ask me too
Wanna make love wit u althrough the night
Can't wait till you be my wife

3.)

I can tell workin out is your hobby
When I think of you I think fo J-LO in the lobby
When I looked at your direction
I thought you where the defenition of perfection
Thats why I adore you
I knew I wanted you the first minute I saw you
I am luckt to find a women just a loyal

4.)

Girlm I just want to look into ya eyes
And watch the sunrise
No more lies, no more tears to cry
No more reasons for leave
You I belive in
I'll love you till the day I stop breathin, I love ya girl

5.)

My heart can't take no more
Wounds that I feel till this day are still sore
But you have come into my life and took away the hurt
People say love don't cost a thing, you don't know how much your worth
I like it when ya call me honey
With your smile you can make my rainy days sunny
When ya say ya love me I love ya more
My heart no longer aches no long does it sore
When ya say your thinking of me to
I'm probably lookin at ya picture think of you
On a scale fo 1-10 I'll give ya a 30
If I get enionally attached please don't hurt me

6.)

To my girl with much luv
Close my eyes and reminiscing all the times we hugged
Luv everythin about ya ta the way ya say things the way u look
Girl u like a drug u got me hooked
I luv u hope u feel the same way too
This rhyme was just written just for you
I brought ya the laughs and the tears
I just hope our luv will last a thousand years


Tell me what ya'll think

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Hey Okay Diz Wuz Pretty Deep & Emotional But Yo Sme Linez Wuz Way Short Dat Iz Not Good An Also U Had 6 Seperate Verses Or Sumthan Try Making It Shorter And Getting 2 Da Point Quicker But Itz Not Dat Bad U Got My Proppz BabyGurl

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ok first thing, I didn't write dat, my x wrote it

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