My heart frozen where it is, not beatin, not movin.//
I see everyone around me, and I cry.//
Cry because I'll never be as beautiful, never skinny, never talented.//
Is it jealousy, or is it pitty, the feeling of all my insecurities.//
There balled up, as i am on the freezing floor, shivering.//
But is the floor really cold, or is it just my body.//
Shuting out everything else, intaking only my monsterous thoughts.//
Blinding me of the reality around my senses.//
The mirror in front of me, all it shows is the mess.//
The mess of my life, when it should be so "perfect".//
Forget the mirror, let it fall to the floor in a million pieces like I am.//
Let it feel pain, but it cannot only I can.//
Can i fall to the floor in a million pieces, to let everything scatter.//
Scatter out of my life, out of everythin, to where i am a worthless being.//
That time is close, and then there will be no more cryin on the floor.//
No more tears being spilt, because I will be gone.//
No more mourning, because there will be none at all.//
No more me, because I am not here at all.//

whutup with all the sad down type poems.. don't ya'll people have happy lives!? lol....

this was nice..... a more straight forward poem.. but it's nice.. instead of all that complicated bullshit poems we see

um theres stuff like insite....read deeper in the poem....but i guess i'mma have to explain this poem to

Good Stiff , Girl ! I Definately Enjoyed Reading This Piece , I Can Tell That You Are A True Poet , I'm Sure You Know What I Mean By That , Nonetheless , I Feel That This Came From Your Heart , You Express Yourself Well , I Look Forward To Reading More From You . . . . .

Peace & Love

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Click Me!

this was nice in wordplay. it flowed real well. stayed on topic and all around good peice. hadeverything, just wish itwas an happier peice.

joey

YO BABY....THIS WAS TIGHT
REALLY.....
I CAN PICTURE SOMETHIN LIKE THIS BEING READ TO A CROWD...
"The mirror in front of me, all it shows is the mess.//
The mess of my life, when it should be so "perfect".//
Forget the mirror, let it fall to the floor in a million pieces like I am.//
Let it feel pain, but it cannot only I can.//"

THOSE WERE MY FAVORITE LINES
VERY NICE

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not all poetry is to be happy..some of it..its just to let ya feeligs out...or past feelings out..or to portray a feeling of darkness..etc...much luv..God bless...1

p.s. and i already got yelled at for this piece..my baby said he dont want me writtin pieces like this

aight..fuck this shit..ya'll bogus...uppin for the damn sleepers....fuck it

kinda sad but uhhh good

once again dis PAPISWIFEY...yo- im agreeing wit e'ery1 else. dis piece was tight. and it does seem like u write a lot of sad stuff sumtimes but dats cool, dats u and ur good at it so keep it up! respect

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AAH!!!! SIS, DAT WAS ILL! IT WAS DEEP! FAREAL, REMEMBER WHEN YOU THOUGHT I COULD WRIGHT POEM BETTER THAN YOU????? WELL I DON'T THINK THAT'S EVEN POSSIBLE ANYMORE! YOU GOT WAY MORE POETIC-NESS THAN ME AND MORE THAN I COULD EVER GET. YOU'RE A PURE TALENTED PERSON, AND DON'T EVER PUT YOURSELF DOWN! YOU GONNA MAKE IT! LOVE,
YOUR SIS.

Dis was interesting. I guess you just gotta stop thinking negatively all the time. Cuz not only r u hurting urself but u're hurting everyone around you. Think on that. Holla.

forreal u makin me sad spittin sad poems

but i love readin your stuff

so keep it comin

HOLLA

haha..ya'll sound like my boyfriend.."dont be writtin iish like that" haha....sorry ya'll didn't know it made you that upset..much luv..God bless..1..